bbbbrrriiiingg bbbbrrrrriiiiinnng. Apollo picked up the phone only to hear Phoenix's voice. "Apollo we need you here immediately." As he went to work he was wondering what was going on. When he got there Pheonix sitting on the couch. "What is the problem?" Apollo asked. "Me and Trucy can't play monopoly with just two people." Pheonix replied. Just then the door opened and a ??? voice says "What have you done to my office?" As pheonix looked over he thought to himself "That voice, could it be?" Mia was at the door in maya's body. Mia replied with golden words " Maya told me to deliver a message" she told him. They went into another room to discuss it. Apollo told Trucy "I'll be back" Later in the office that night Apollo stood pondering It's been 4 hours since I left, looks like nobody's here. Trucy came in and told him "Daddy's not here right now, he said he was going ta a bridge in the mountains." "Come on let's go." Apollo told her. "Go where?" Lamiror interrupted."You're here." Apollo replied in a shocked voice. "We're going to a bridge in the mountains." Apollo told her. "You mean Dusky Bridge? Do you even know how to get there?" She asked him. "I was planning on stopping for directions." Apollo replied. "I'll give you the directions, but the bridge is very rickety so be careful."

June 16 7:36 p.m. Hazakura temple entrance

Apollo walked into a greeting with the head nun Bikini (7 years older) with a bright welcome. They talk about Pheonix and where he went off to. She also tells about him having wierd friends like someone who whips the judge (franziska von karma) and someone who can pull a man out of a hat (trucy) . She has no idea where Pheonix went and they ask about hazakura temple. She sighed for a moment, shook her head, and told them to be on their way.They headed into the main hall, and found a hooded girl named Iris who they talk to about Pheonix She explains that he went to the inner temple. After hearing the news they told her about Bikini's strange actions and asked Iris about Hazakura temple. Iris smiled and told them that she didn't know anything about Bikini's actions. "That's not what we asked." Apollo told her. "I don't know what to tell you. It's a channeling dojo in the mountains." She told him. Apollo sighed. They headed over across the bridge, but when they arrived at the entrance they heard a terrible scream coming from the sacred cavern. They ran in and saw a strange girl staring at a dead body. She started to cry and told them to run and call the police. The girl ran with them and they went for the phone, but on the way Apollo found a note that read "Apollo , defend Pearl , I know who the real murder is. sincerely, Pheonix " .

When Apollo got to the bridge he saw a cloaked person dragging a body over to the river on the other side of the bridge. Apollo screamed "Stop!" and out of shock the unknown person threw the body into the river. The cloaked person then ran away into the forest. Apollo found a hat on the snow and trucy screamed "Thats daddy's hat!" "What's it doing out here?" Apollo asked in a trembling voice. Apollo ran across the bridge and called the police.

To be continued next week

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I am changing this thing up a little so don't blame me for all these empty comments

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Hey Xbro Ace this is a nice story, but you're posting this in the wrong forum. This should go in "Present Testimony".
Mods can you move this thread.

Moving to Present Testimony.

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Any tips on how to make this better, leave me a private message

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Anybody can add onto this story but I need to make the ending also help me with the first part of the investigation. I will only put in one a week but you guys can put one in whenever you want

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I will accept critisizm so tell me if I need to take out the smilies

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Thanks for the advice readers

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Anybody who wants to can name the prosecuter for this case but for now I will continue on with the investigation.

I will have one chapter a week so private message me on ideas.
Remember Friday is chapter day so be prepared.

Oh yeah, I'm totally hyped for Friday. You are a very good writer, Xbro Ace.
However, you've got to proof read your story. There are too many mistakes!

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I'm in the process of proofreading right now. I need suggestions for the prosecutor, and the judge.

Hey, it's Friday! Time for another chapter to the story. Here's some suggestions.
The prosecutor should be.... and the Judge should be... The Canadian Judge!

Sorry about that everybody, my computer wouldn't pull up this website. I will have to change chapter day to Monday. I think my timeline is behind this websites so it might be a little late.


I am incredibly sorry for missing all of the chapters I am supposed to post, I am very busy at school right now.

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