Title:Love Tradegy
Author:Ace Prosecutor
Rating:PG
Genre:
Status: incomplete
Pairing: Phoenix/Maya (maybe more?)
Summary:A Phoenix/Maya love story
Notes: Thanks Darzie and Sonictails1 for inspiring me to make this.

March 1 - thru March 2

intro: Phoenix Wright took a case from a deserate 21 year old male. His name was Richard Robbinson.He was accused of murdering 18 year old Jessica Janes. The prosecutor was Winston Payne, veteran prosecutor. The murder weapon was a knife wih Richard's fingerprints and bloodstains at the blade of the knife. The victim autospy report confirms that the time of death was March 1, 6:08 AM and she was killed by a stabbing and shot in the chest.The pistol wasnt found at the crime scene.A witness named Bill Edwardington saw the scene of the crime when the murder took place. The next day in court, Phoenix was getting the upper hand when it comes to getting him innocent but has no proof.The only proof was the pistol which has Bill's fingerprints but no one knows where it was but Bill. The defendant was then proven guilty after Phoenix tried so hard....The only reason why Richard's fingerprints are on the knife was because he had unwillingly picked it up,not thinking. The crime scene was dark in an apartment with no power so he couldn't see....now what?

Love Tradegy Pt.1.0

Phoenix's Apartment, 8:02 AM

Gooood morning Nick! Phoenix woke up, seeing Maya's face in
front of him."M-Maya...What are you doing here?",Phoenix asked. "Just to make
you get up from bed and have a great day!" Maya said, With a happy look on
her face. Phoenix got up, not replying to her statement but said, "get out
Maya!" and he also said,with a angry look on his face, "I'm not in the mood
today! Get out!" Phoenix then went to the bathroom,slamming the door.
Maya,then left,crying on the way. The only reason why Phoenix in a bad mood
is because he got angry from losing to Winston Payne. When that happened,
Phoenix got laughed at by other people. He hasn't been taking a case since.

March 21,Wright and Co. Law Offices, 9:00 AM

Phoenix got out of the Metro bus and walked to the office.When he got there, he realized that Maya wasn't around. All there was was a note on Phoenix's desk,saying this,
"Phoenix, i'm tired of being around you! You always ignore me, and you don't

say anything nice to me ever since you lost to Payne!I'm starting to think

that you really hate me!Well that's it, i'm leaving you forever!Go take care of yourself!!!"

At the end of the note has Maya signature. "What should I do?" Phoenix said. "I can't belive that Maya left me because of my arrongance!"A tear has came out off his eyes."W-will I see her again?" Phoenix thought with a sad look in his face."Now what...", Phoenix said.

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Last edited by Ace Prosecutor on Wed Apr 04, 2007 3:21 pm, edited 6 times in total.

Go on ace! Good work.

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thanks Darzie!

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It's okay for a start; I'd give it a 6/10. I hope you don't mind, but I changed your post title so "Tragedy" was spelled correctly. I didn't, however, touch anything in your actual post.

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Thanks DSL-69, this is my first time making a fanfic so what so you expect?

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This is pretty good, AP.

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I agree with DSL's score, but it just feels TOO short. I assume it's a prologue short of piece and more will come in massive doses later?

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I'm thinking of adding a intro. I'm not done with the story yet! Besides, this is my first time writing a fanfic, so expect it to have a flaw and something missing. I'll do better next time

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Added intro

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I liked the story, and the overall idea. However, I'm purty strict when it comes to things like grammar and whatnot.It just felt like it was missing something. Perhaps the fact that Maya left so abruptantly(SP?) got to me. HOWEVER, for a first fic this is a unusually high standard compared to some first's I've seen.(My first fic sucked. The re-write was even worst) Just make the chapters a little longer and watch your grammar and I think this could be great!
p.s. Forever! Yay!

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Thanks for the advice! And yes forever!

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Welcome!

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