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Comic #1
Page 1: The first day
Page 2: Mr Grossbergs Grandaughter
Page 3: Same old, Same old...
Page 4: Ass Kissing 101
Page 5: Payne the comedian
Page 6: Dirty Knives
Page 7: Icebreaking
Page 8: Testimony
Page 9: The first contridiction
Page 10: Elmwood fails
Page 11: Elmwood fails again!
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Though one thing, trials usually start at 10:00 AM.
If you're looking for a name for your case, you should
base it on the case itself. We haven't seen anything of
the actual murder case, so asking us for help with
it wouldn't be a good move.
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base it on the case itself. We haven't seen anything of
the actual murder case, so asking us for help with
it wouldn't be a good move.
Storywise so far, it's quite good.
Though one thing, trials usually start at 10:00 AM.
If you're looking for a name for your case, you should
base it on the case itself. We haven't seen anything of
the actual murder case, so asking us for help with
it wouldn't be a good move.
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But, the only problems I see, are spelling and grammatical errors.
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As was I. *sigh* I've got a new comic up my sleeve now though.
I should really get on with that... why is it taking me so long to do a 4x3 panel TRAILER?
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Anyways, it's still good so far. (Though one detail is that
Udgey doesn't ask if the prosecution/defense is read.
I'm a perfectionist, so don't mind me. I notice the little things.)
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On closer inspection, Gary does seem similar...
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I'm not going lie and say I've never read Francis' comic (I have and I have enjoyed it. Well done Greeny XD) But I swear I didn't intend to rip him off. Honestly Gary's character is going to develop as this comic goes along, as well as telling you why he's so arogent in the first place. And on that note heres page 4...
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Gary may have the ego but he's not gentleman enough.
Lol, you sure accented Udgey's goofy personality there.
Another detail I noticed, isn't it a bit soon to hold the trial within one day
of the murder...?
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of the murder...?
Anouther very good point Mr Greeny. I felt that Payne would be eager to start a trial that he thought he could win. Im not sure if I'm right or not but didn't Maya Fey's trial start a day after Mia's death?
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Only the Judge can like Lawrence Curls.
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[/URL]Page 5 is up. Oh look Gary actully has a heart...
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It's a good thing to... keep 'em in suspense, you'know?
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Page 6. If I can I will try to add one more page tonight, and end it with a witness about to start is testimony but it may not end up that way...
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of the murder...?
Anouther very good point Mr Greeny. I felt that Payne would be eager to start a trial that he thought he could win. Im not sure if I'm right or not but didn't Maya Fey's trial start a day after Mia's death?
Almost all of the cases in the Ace Attorney series the trials were the next day, they work fast in video-games.
But this was an awesome story so far. And I like Gary's character, arragont people make me laugh.
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Thank you very much, I do my best. The story is going to get more interesting as it goes along, I have some good ideas in mind for future cases. My main ambition is to make a radio play of Gary Elmwood. Im not a very good spriter, but I think im a good voice actor and I'd love to give Gary a voice. Perhaps when I finish the first case, I'll have a go...
Page 7 is up. The judge isn't very good with expresions...
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As long as it gets the story across, right?
Which is, still good so far.
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Page 8. A obvious contridiction. Cookie for who finds it.
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Well, if there was a ton of blood, it would be difficult to determine the exact location of the wound, so it would be understandable to think it was in the stomach if it pierced the lowest part of the lungs (especially if it was thrust upward)
That's what I'm thinking.... If someone witnessed the crime
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Well, im glad I've confused everyone
Jamie is an idiot... That's all i'm going to say. He's just getting old...
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He's so rotund... like a big teddy bear!!
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He's so rotund... like a big teddy bear!!
I know. Grossberg is brilliant! It hurt me to write what I did...
Page 10 is up. Damn you Udgey...
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Sorry for the lack of updates. I've had anouther bit of drama coursework. (God damn I hate the theory work)
Page 11 is up. Anouther row. Rejoyce!!
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Sorry for the lack of updates. I've had anouther bit of drama coursework. (God damn I hate the theory work)
Page 11 is up. Anouther row. Rejoyce!!
Um, in one of the boxes, Gary's textbox is labeled "Payne" instead of "Gary"
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Cheres Riu. I've edited that now and made my pages links rather then spoiler tags as it was starting to look messy...
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