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Turnabout Detective (Updated with second chapter 7/1/09 )Topic%20Title
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Title: Turnabout Detective
Author: Gum_on_your_shoe
Rating: T
Genre: Mystery
Status: Not completed
Pairing: Er...not really any pairing some slight Gumshoe/OC-ness but that won't last very long.
Summary: Gumshoe is being stalked by a crazy 14-year-old fangirl *coughmecough*, and to make things worse she dies a few days later and it's pinned on poor Gumshoe. Will Phoenix be able to save him or will Edgeworth get his guilty verdict, and Gumshoe's reputation destroyed?

Before you start reading: You should know I am NOT a professional writer by any means, another-wards I will have some grammar, punctuation, and many other errors in my writing. I haven't written fan-fiction in six years because my writing was so poor I was flamed frequently (I know that's not an excuse, but just a warning to my crappy fan-fiction skills). Constructive criticism appreciated, flaming won't be. D:

Enjoy (hopefully ^^; )

Spoiler: Chapter 1
“HEY PAL LET ME IN!” Gumshoe shouted from outside while fiercely knocking at the door of Wright & Co. law offices.

“Hey Nick! It sounds like Detective Gumshoe is knocking at the door.”

Nick was cleaning the toilet. “What would Gumshoe be doing here?” Nick grumbled. “Anyway...Maya go answer it! Can’t you see I’m kind of busy with toilet cleaning.” Maya rushed to answer the door.

“WHATEVER YOU DO DON’T LET HER IN PAL!”

Maya jumped, she closed and locked the door after Gumshoe dashed through the entrance. He took a sigh of relief. “Thanks,” he said breathing heavily. “I almost didn’t make it.”

Nick peaked his head out from the bathroom. “What’s going on?” “There is this girl....she won’t leave me alone! You have to hide me pal!” Pearl seemed to over hear ‘girl’ and ‘alone’ “Ooooh is she your special someone Mr. Scruffy Detective?” Detective Gumshoe shook his head. “NO WAY PAL! Far from it, besides she’s too young for me.”

Phoenix wondered what a little girl would be doing chasing after Gumshoe, and WHY anyone would go after Gumshoe in the first place.

“So why did you come here, of all places?”

“It was the closest place I could run to pal!”

Maya snickered. “Wait, so your running away from a harmless little girl?”

Detective Gumshoe made a face and mumbled “Harmless and little are an understatement.”
Suddenly there was a loud click that came from the door and a shriek came from outside Wright & Co. Law Offices.

“GUMMYBEAAAAAAAAAAR YOU DON’T THINK I’D GIVE UP THAT EASILY DO YOU!?!?”
Gumshoe grabbed Phoenix’s shoulders “YOU HAVE TO HIDE ME BEFORE--” The door swung open.

A girl about 5’’2 with dark brown hair tied in a ponytail strode through. “What are you doing here?” Maya asked. “Isn’t it obvious?” The girl waved to Gumshoe.

Gumshoe slapped his hand to his face. “Go home kid.” The girl made a face, “I went through so much trouble just to come see you, and you want me to go home?” Phoenix stared.

“Why are you stalking Gumshoe exactly?”

“Stalking is such a harsh word....I prefer fangirling.”

Maya cocked her head to the side. “Fangirling?“

“Yup.” the girl replied.

“Why would anyone ‘fangirl’ after Mr. Scruffy Detective?” Pearl asked.

“Hey! I’m a lovable character you know!” Gumshoe scoffed.

“That you are Gummybear.” The girl hugged him from behind.

“Where are your parents?” Phoenix asked, while taking off neon yellow gloves that he was wearing from cleaning the toilet.

“Work.” She replied.

“And your sister?” Gumshoe wondered.

“Grocery store.”

“Miss lady, do you always talk in one word answers?” Pearl tugged on the girl’s sleeve.

“Not really.” She grinned.

“Okay kid, shouldn’t you be getting home, before your sister comes back from shopping?” Gumshoe crossed his arms, feeling frustrated.

“I’ll only go if you walk me home.” The girl giggled and grabbed onto Gumshoe’s arm, expecting him to escort her. “You wouldn’t want me to get hit by a car or something, right?”

Gumshoe sighed. Maya started laughing, Phoenix shook his head and muttered something about ‘kids these days’.
Gumshoe walked toward the door, the girl clutched his arm tightly.

“Let’s get you home.” The detective sighed again.

“Somehow, I knew you’d see it my way.” She grinned as they left Wright & Co. Law offices.

Phoenix rubbed his temples as if he didn’t believe what he just witnessed. "This has to be a joke."

“Hey Nick you missed a spot!” Maya smiled as she pointed to inside the toilet bowl. “Better get back to work”

Nick sighed, put his neon yellow gloves back on and started scrubbing away at the toilet, AGAIN.


Spoiler: Chapter 2 (Many thanks to Lida_Rose for editing this chapter <3)
Gumshoe lightly rapped on the front door of a large, white and gray townhouse. The fourteen-year-old girl crossed her fingers, hoping no one would be home. The door of the townhouse slowly opened. A tall, very beautiful and slender lady was standing in the doorway. The fourteen-year-old released Gumshoe’s arm, and shifted her baby blue eyes away from the lady standing in the doorway.

“I thought told you to stay in the house! Why didn’t you listen!?” The slender young lady flipped her long, dark brown hair back and crossed her arms.
“Damnit, Abby! You never listen to anyone! Why do you have to be so difficult?”

“You never let me do anything!” Abby screamed. Gumshoe backed away. He wanted to say something, but he thought it was best to not get involved between the two bitter rivals.

The gorgeous woman ignored her complaint. “Thank you for bringing her back again, Detective.”

Gumshoe nodded. He knew that this ‘stalking’ issue had happened quite a few times, each time he was the one to escort her back home. He often wondered why she never listened to anyone in her household, let alone himself. Why wouldn’t she leave him alone? Maybe she wasn’t sane? Maybe she was just lonely? Or something else? “I have to get going now. I need to get back to the Criminal Affairs Department before they dock my pay.” With that, Gumshoe started to walk away.

“Sometimes I wish my parents never decided to adopt you!” Abby scoffed and headed inside the house.

“Well, sometimes I wish I wasn’t your adopted sister!” Abby’s sister shut the door behind her.

Abby screeched at the top of her lungs,“SOMETIMES I WISH I COULD KILL MYSELF, SO I DON’T HAVE TO PUT UP WITH THIS HELL OR YOU!” She scurried up the stairs into her room and closed the door with a loud SLAM.

Abby’s sister mumbled to herself, “You don’t really mean that, do you?” She sat down on the first step of the stair case worried about her sister; a few tears started rolling down her cheeks at the thought of her committing suicide.

The Fragrance of Dark Coffee always smells good ;P

:wall-bang: "Leave the getting excited over absolutely nothing to our teenybopper fans, ja?"


Last edited by Gum_on_your_Shoe on Thu Jul 02, 2009 3:08 am, edited 4 times in total.
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You’re so small in such a big world...

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This is great so far!

And...Perhaps an editor would be ideal for your writing? If you want one, I'll gladly do it. I love editing stories. :D
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A.K.A. Court or Court-Records.

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Poor, poor gumshoe...>.>
Carry on!
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Come to the MIEGO side we have coffee

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Lida_Rose wrote:
This is great so far!

And...Perhaps an editor would be ideal for your writing? If you want one, I'll gladly do it. I love editing stories. :D

Thanks!

That would be awesome! I have so much trouble with grammar and punctuation.

Chess wrote:
Poor, poor gumshoe...>.>
Carry on!


:3 It'll on get worse from here on out, for now at least.
I will ^^
The Fragrance of Dark Coffee always smells good ;P

:wall-bang: "Leave the getting excited over absolutely nothing to our teenybopper fans, ja?"
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You’re so small in such a big world...

Gender: Female

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Awesome! Just PM me the next addition, and I'll edit it as soon as I can. :D
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:)

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XD That was funny. I liked that, poor Gumshoe.
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C.Gholy wrote:
XD That was funny. I liked that, poor Gumshoe.

Thank you :3

Second chapter is up! Along with a huge appericiation to Lida_Rose for helping me out by volunteering to edit my story.
The Fragrance of Dark Coffee always smells good ;P

:wall-bang: "Leave the getting excited over absolutely nothing to our teenybopper fans, ja?"
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Well GO AHEAD AND DIE. If you frame it on Gumshoe though, I'm kicking your butt after having you channeled back from the dead.

(Man I'm mean.)
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Come to the MIEGO side we have coffee

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Chess wrote:
Well GO AHEAD AND DIE. If you frame it on Gumshoe though, I'm kicking your butt after having you channeled back from the dead.

(Man I'm mean.)


:hotti: You'll be surprised how some of these things turn out (that is if I can make it interesting ^^; )
The Fragrance of Dark Coffee always smells good ;P

:wall-bang: "Leave the getting excited over absolutely nothing to our teenybopper fans, ja?"
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and the plot thickens

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this is great i can't wait to keep reading aw poor gumshoe he's just tooo nice haha
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