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All these fics are awesome! The Trials of Law and Life has that feeling of mystery in it. It's almost like watching a movie. Serious Matter is so well written, I could just feel it. It just seems to believable. Now You Fully Know is so entertaining. I found myself laughing throughout the whole thing for some odd reason. Maybe because I'm just a sadistic girl.
I like new reviewers putting in their thoughts on my work. Serious Matter I consider to be the most believeable of all my work due to it actually being based off of a real issue involving the safety of children and the reactions of their friends and the support the friends need when the victimized friend dies. I like to write angst regarding victims of crime, the same reason why I enjoyed writing Sisterly Savior.
Trials Of Law And Life will be many chapters long and will encompass a few plot points which all connect in someway. It took a few days to finalize the main plot point and I still don't have all the chapters planned. I consider TOLAL to be more like a long running serialized TV Show, but unlike LOST you don't need to read every chapter to read the next chapter. It helps but it isn't required. I'm enjoying writing it and the next chapter is the next thing I'm posting.
Now You Fully Know was a request on the Phoenix Wright Kink Meme. The meme can produce very strange requests. Poor Apollo.
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Alright! It's an awesome chapter! I wonder what's going to happen next!
Please give me a decent review. Something to the extent of C.Gholy's review on fanfiction.net. You can spare three minutes to actually think and write something explaining the thoughts of this chapter and going into detail. I am starting to really get annoyed at people who write one-liner reviewers without going into hardly any detail. I will admit occasionally I do that but that won't happen again. I appreciate your still liking the story though.
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Alright! It's an awesome chapter! I wonder what's going to happen next!
Please give me a decent review. Something to the extent of C.Gholy's review on fanfiction.net. You can spare three minutes to actually think and write something explaining the thoughts of this chapter and going into detail. I am starting to really get annoyed at people who write one-liner reviewers without going into hardly any detail. I will admit occasionally I do that but that won't happen again.
I'm sorry about that. I'm curious about Richard Rodriquez. I noticed that the judge greeted him a bit differently than Phoenix. Almost like they're familiar with each other. I wonder what he's going to talk to the judge about. His scars seem to explain quite a bit about him for some odd reason.
Rosa's certainly an intriguing character. I wonder what her intentions are. I'm guessing she's doing a good job hiding her habits since it doesn't look like Trucy picked up on it. Now that you mention it though, Apollo does seem to almost be defending guilty clients. Like they're innocent of the charge they were given but, guilty of other things. I wonder what's going through Charlie's head now though.
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I'm sorry about that. I'm curious about Richard Rodriquez. I noticed that the judge greeted him a bit differently than Phoenix. Almost like they're familiar with each other. I wonder what he's going to talk to the judge about. His scars seem to explain quite a bit about him for some odd reason.
Rosa's certainly an intriguing character. I wonder what her intentions are. I'm guessing she's doing a good job hiding her habits since it doesn't look like Trucy picked up on it. Now that you mention it though, Apollo does seem to almost be defending guilty clients. Like they're innocent of the charge they were given but, guilty of other things. I wonder what's going through Charlie's head now though.
Rosa's certainly an intriguing character. I wonder what her intentions are. I'm guessing she's doing a good job hiding her habits since it doesn't look like Trucy picked up on it. Now that you mention it though, Apollo does seem to almost be defending guilty clients. Like they're innocent of the charge they were given but, guilty of other things. I wonder what's going through Charlie's head now though.
Much, much better. The Judge and Richard know each other from quite awhile back, but I'm not revealing anything about that. And yes Rosa is very important, let's say she knows about Apollo and Trucy's abilities and knows how to go undetected to an extent. Some secrets regarding these characters will be revealed in this story and the rest will be revealed in the sequel. Remember the line; Everything Will Lead To This Moment. I'm not going into anymore details but these new characters are connected to each other, not by family line necessarily but through events that have gone back many years into the past.
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Okay, I'm going to start with the complaints first if only to get them out of the way so that I can gush about the rest of it. While I'm not trying to sound like a broken record, grammar is still an issue. It's nothing ground breaking, but it could still use some work.
Examples: "'Hello, Mr. Wright. We got through the first day of trial okay.' Apollo said." The way it was broken up was just a bit jarring for me, but I think the issue was that you were missing the first comma. When added, it lends a different set up to the line.
“'Come on in, Mr. Wright. I have a feeling that I know what you're talking about.' Phoenix opened the door and saw that the chambers were nicely kept with pictures of the previous judges of this court and the new flag of the State Of California above the judge. '(More optional as it's not strictly incorrect, but you might want to add "Would you" in front. I just think that it runs a bit smoother that way)Care for some coffee Mr. Wright while we talk?' The Judge asked Phoenix."
“'How is she doing, Mr. Wright. I’ve only seen her a few days ago after she was released from the hospital.' Apollo asked hoping for an answer."
The rest are really just comma issues and I won't list all them here as that would be redundant and more then a little silly.
Now, on to the good. I love the way that you're developing the plot. You really have me hooked into the story and I'm very curious about what's going to happen to the point that when I saw that you had updated, I read your fic immediately. I just couldn't wait. ^_^
The characters are well handled. Trucy is so terribly cute and, the shipper in me loves Apollo's concern for Vera, even if there is no actual romance in it yet. And I find your take on his attitude towards her very realistic.
Anyway, this was excellent. Very nice work. ^_^
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Well, well... this is getting interesting. :)
Okay, I'm going to start with the complaints first if only to get them out of the way so that I can gush about the rest of it. While I'm not trying to sound like a broken record, grammar is still an issue. It's nothing ground breaking, but it could still use some work.
Examples: "'Hello, Mr. Wright. We got through the first day of trial okay.' Apollo said." The way it was broken up was just a bit jarring for me, but I think the issue was that you were missing the first comma. When added, it lends a different set up to the line.
“'Come on in, Mr. Wright. I have a feeling that I know what you're talking about.' Phoenix opened the door and saw that the chambers were nicely kept with pictures of the previous judges of this court and the new flag of the State Of California above the judge. '(More optional as it's not strictly incorrect, but you might want to add "Would you" in front. I just think that it runs a bit smoother that way)Care for some coffee Mr. Wright while we talk?' The Judge asked Phoenix."
“'How is she doing, Mr. Wright. I’ve only seen her a few days ago after she was released from the hospital.' Apollo asked hoping for an answer."
The rest are really just comma issues and I won't list all them here as that would be redundant and more then a little silly.
Now, on to the good. I love the way that you're developing the plot. You really have me hooked into the story and I'm very curious about what's going to happen to the point that when I saw that you had updated, I read your fic immediately. I just couldn't wait. ^_^
The characters are well handled. Trucy is so terribly cute and, the shipper in me loves Apollo's concern for Vera, even if there is no actual romance in it yet. And I find your take on his attitude towards her very realistic.
Anyway, this was excellent. Very nice work. ^_^
Okay, I'm going to start with the complaints first if only to get them out of the way so that I can gush about the rest of it. While I'm not trying to sound like a broken record, grammar is still an issue. It's nothing ground breaking, but it could still use some work.
Examples: "'Hello, Mr. Wright. We got through the first day of trial okay.' Apollo said." The way it was broken up was just a bit jarring for me, but I think the issue was that you were missing the first comma. When added, it lends a different set up to the line.
“'Come on in, Mr. Wright. I have a feeling that I know what you're talking about.' Phoenix opened the door and saw that the chambers were nicely kept with pictures of the previous judges of this court and the new flag of the State Of California above the judge. '(More optional as it's not strictly incorrect, but you might want to add "Would you" in front. I just think that it runs a bit smoother that way)Care for some coffee Mr. Wright while we talk?' The Judge asked Phoenix."
“'How is she doing, Mr. Wright. I’ve only seen her a few days ago after she was released from the hospital.' Apollo asked hoping for an answer."
The rest are really just comma issues and I won't list all them here as that would be redundant and more then a little silly.
Now, on to the good. I love the way that you're developing the plot. You really have me hooked into the story and I'm very curious about what's going to happen to the point that when I saw that you had updated, I read your fic immediately. I just couldn't wait. ^_^
The characters are well handled. Trucy is so terribly cute and, the shipper in me loves Apollo's concern for Vera, even if there is no actual romance in it yet. And I find your take on his attitude towards her very realistic.
Anyway, this was excellent. Very nice work. ^_^
Thank you for pointing out these stupid grammar errors I keep making. I really need a Beta Reader to check these.
I love this plot that seems to have stuck into my head. I continue to love that I've got the characterization down perfect. I'm not going to rush Apollo and Vera into a relationship, but I feel Apollo should have his concern for her at this point.
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Anyway, I'm quite pleased to see that you found a beta. The grammar is better, but you might want to warn EvilWaffleS to keep a special eye out for commas as I'm still seeing mistakes.
A few example...
"'Well, it doesn’t help that you woke me up when there was no trials on the agenda. Besides, you have Physical Education that’s (not a comma issue, but I think that "which you're required to take" sounds better then using "that", but the choice is yours) required to take. All I have to do is jog for a little while. But I‘ll meet you girls at the park again.' Apollo said as he was starting to lose some of his breath from keeping at his assistant’s speed."
"'You're not leaving me and Daddy forever? Right, Polly?' Right after he heard those words he reassured her that he would never leave them forever. He knew that he had a responsibility to take care of her and look out for her. He suspected Phoenix knew of one key reason for that, but had yet to tell either of them."
"'Fine, I’ll be back in a bit.' Apollo went up to the water fountain which was located up a hill, so Apollo could see the three girls from a good view."
There are a few more examples, but it is looking better.
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It's quite good. The characters are believable and the writing compelling. I really like the way you wrote Trucy in the beginning. She has this carefree manner about her when she teases Apollo which is very true to her character and makes what is about to happen all the more horrific. Poor Trucy. :(
Anyway, I'm quite pleased to see that you found a beta. The grammar is better, but you might want to warn EvilWaffleS to keep a special eye out for commas as I'm still seeing mistakes.
A few example...
"'Well, it doesn’t help that you woke me up when there was no trials on the agenda. Besides, you have Physical Education that’s (not a comma issue, but I think that "which you're required to take" sounds better then using "that", but the choice is yours) required to take. All I have to do is jog for a little while. But I‘ll meet you girls at the park again.' Apollo said as he was starting to lose some of his breath from keeping at his assistant’s speed."
"'You're not leaving me and Daddy forever? Right, Polly?' Right after he heard those words he reassured her that he would never leave them forever. He knew that he had a responsibility to take care of her and look out for her. He suspected Phoenix knew of one key reason for that, but had yet to tell either of them."
"'Fine, I’ll be back in a bit.' Apollo went up to the water fountain which was located up a hill, so Apollo could see the three girls from a good view."
There are a few more examples, but it is looking better.
Anyway, I'm quite pleased to see that you found a beta. The grammar is better, but you might want to warn EvilWaffleS to keep a special eye out for commas as I'm still seeing mistakes.
A few example...
"'Well, it doesn’t help that you woke me up when there was no trials on the agenda. Besides, you have Physical Education that’s (not a comma issue, but I think that "which you're required to take" sounds better then using "that", but the choice is yours) required to take. All I have to do is jog for a little while. But I‘ll meet you girls at the park again.' Apollo said as he was starting to lose some of his breath from keeping at his assistant’s speed."
"'You're not leaving me and Daddy forever? Right, Polly?' Right after he heard those words he reassured her that he would never leave them forever. He knew that he had a responsibility to take care of her and look out for her. He suspected Phoenix knew of one key reason for that, but had yet to tell either of them."
"'Fine, I’ll be back in a bit.' Apollo went up to the water fountain which was located up a hill, so Apollo could see the three girls from a good view."
There are a few more examples, but it is looking better.
Thank you for once again pointing those out as I'll tell EvilWaffleS whenever she comes on MSN. Yes writing Trucy being all carefree and then having two of her friends being shot dead and being kidnapped right after that makes me love this plot even more. Thank you once again for reviewing.
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The emotions are conveyed nicely. You can feel the regret from Apollo and you can just see him blaming himself. Also, Phoenix's initial shock is right there as well as him trying to keep his head on straight.
I loved how you dug into Trucy's personality. How she has this mask on her hiding her lonliness and the pain that she's going through. You also showed all the lives she has touched with the chunk with Ema and Klavier.
I look foraward to seeing how this turns out.
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Wow, that one really was a bit chilling. It just made me realize that anything can hit anyone. Like, the day could start out alright, typical and just normal, and boom that happens. Also, the fact that it could happen during the split second a guardian is looking away.
The emotions are conveyed nicely. You can feel the regret from Apollo and you can just see him blaming himself. Also, Phoenix's initial shock is right there as well as him trying to keep his head on straight.
I loved how you dug into Trucy's personality. How she has this mask on her hiding her lonliness and the pain that she's going through. You also showed all the lives she has touched with the chunk with Ema and Klavier.
I look foraward to seeing how this turns out.
The emotions are conveyed nicely. You can feel the regret from Apollo and you can just see him blaming himself. Also, Phoenix's initial shock is right there as well as him trying to keep his head on straight.
I loved how you dug into Trucy's personality. How she has this mask on her hiding her lonliness and the pain that she's going through. You also showed all the lives she has touched with the chunk with Ema and Klavier.
I look foraward to seeing how this turns out.
It's possible for that to happen to anyone. Occasionally even adult men. There will be more Apollo and Phoenix blaming themselves as they can't find Trucy immediately and Phoenix becomes very worried and makes a public appeal later on. And yes this subject matter effects almost everyone close to the victim. Thank for reading, reviewing and enjoying the first chapter.
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I thought a comma was necessary here besides,
and maybe for this sentence - you have compulsory PE
I like the way that Apollo is gonna be feeling like shit - the one moment he looks away, is the one time that something happens to her. Really good - I wanna read more!!
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Woah, thats a really good start to a story, though it seemed slightly rushed to me, I would maybe have gone to Trucys point talking to her friends as Apollo walked up the hill, it could have added a higher sense of fear and drama. Its written really well though, and you have got the characters done perfectly, though I would have had more description. I too liked the way she was carefree to begin with, and that created a contrast.
I thought a comma was necessary here besides,
and maybe for this sentence - you have compulsory PE
I like the way that Apollo is gonna be feeling like shit - the one moment he looks away, is the one time that something happens to her. Really good - I wanna read more!!
I thought a comma was necessary here besides,
and maybe for this sentence - you have compulsory PE
I like the way that Apollo is gonna be feeling like shit - the one moment he looks away, is the one time that something happens to her. Really good - I wanna read more!!
I personally don't see how Trucy talking to her friends would create more drama unless I was writing her viewpoint seeing the killers get out of the van. It's a fair observation. Yes I can add more description if I can incoperate that while keeping the flow been dialogue and storytelling. Thank you for the review.
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No prob - and soz for writing kinda harshly - I had like two minutes and wanted to get everything in. And yeah, I meant have Trucy's veiwpoint
When more of the story?
When more of the story?
No you can go ahead and be a bit harsh but make sure you don't go over the top.
I've been sidetracked with other interests recently but I'm almost half-way done the next chapter.
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The Kink Meme request story Now You Fully Know I don't plan to work on anymore. So I'm cancelling that.
Wocky's World - I will have a first chapter of this at some point. Not immediately but I have been brainstorming for this.
Trials Of Law And Life - I think I have the full plot for this story now. This is a major, lengthy story with a sequel. I will work on the next chapter for this after the 1st Chapter for the Trucy Angst story is done.
The Dark Road Ahead - I am working on the 1st Chapter as we speak and as I mentioned earlier I'm about halfway through the chapter. Sometime this week it will be up as soon as neoswordmaster and if he betareads this. So sometime this week you'll finally get to read it.
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Hmmm Maybe I should do an Idea like that for mah stories... anyway at least I know trials of life and law will be updated soon I love that story!
anyway at least I know trials of life and law will be updated soon I love that story!The 1st Chapter of the Trucy Angst story is done. I just need neoswordmaster to get back to me on betareading.
I know many people have been waiting a long time for what will happen in Trials Of Law And Life. The many new characters. Eduardo Rosas Rodriguez, Dr. Alvin Richardson, Rosa Suarez, Richard Rodriguez (No relation to Eduardo) and how they all connect with each other. Eduardo as a mysterious angtagonist, Richardson as a child molestor and presumed close associate with Eduardo. While Rosa Suarez and Richard Rodriguez may seem allies at the moment, they have horrific pasts. Both have witnessed death of those close to them.
This story took weeks of planning and finalizing and I feel some minor details will need to be changed as the story goes along. One thing for sure, remember the number 498 which is in the middle of the Trials Of Law And Life signature made by Vickinator.
If the plot in GS5 conflicts with the plot for this story then we can consider this story to be a seperate branch from GS4. I'll get to working on the next chapter tomorrow.
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I saw you updated The Dark Road Ahead. The format got really messed up just to let you know. But knowing you, you're probably already fixing that right now.
Yes. I copied the updated version from neoswordmaster and pasted it into the same file as the original Chapter 1. So I copied the edited one, pasted it into an entirely new file and uploaded it. Hopefully it will work PROPERLY this time.
EDIT: fanfiction.net is still being screwy. So I'll wait to clear my head to properly upload it.
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Finally there's the properly formatted chapter. I'm never using Microsoft Works again and sticking with OpenOffice. It's rated M for obvious reasons so please remember that.
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Yes. I copied the updated version from neoswordmaster and pasted it into the same file as the original Chapter 1. So I copied the edited one, pasted it into an entirely new file and uploaded it. Hopefully it will work PROPERLY this time.
EDIT: fanfiction.net is still being screwy. So I'll wait to clear my head to properly upload it.
EDIT: fanfiction.net is still being screwy. So I'll wait to clear my head to properly upload it.
It's fine now. Creepy as fuck. Hector needs a good kick in the balls. Poor Trucy and to the rest of them, must be really hard right now to cope. It's going to be really stressful.
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It's fine now. Creepy as fuck. Hector needs a good kick in the balls. Poor Trucy and to the rest of them, must be really hard right now to cope. It's going to be really stressful.
It will get worse for Phoenix and Apollo as they can't find Trucy for a certain amount of time and start to question if she's still alive or being tortured. And yes the violent Trucy abuse will get worse.
.....wait.... 
Thank you for the review. Hector needs a good kick in the balls and then a gunshot in both balls.
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It's fine now. Creepy as fuck. Hector needs a good kick in the balls. Poor Trucy and to the rest of them, must be really hard right now to cope. It's going to be really stressful.
It will get worse for Phoenix and Apollo as they can't find Trucy for a certain amount of time and start to question if she's still alive or being tortured. And yes the violent Trucy abuse will get worse.
.....wait.... Thank you for the review. Hector needs a good kick in the balls and then a gunshot in both balls.
And after that have his balls shreeded from his crotch BWAHAHAHAA (I know I'm demented)
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And after that have his balls shreeded from his crotch BWAHAHAHAA (I know I'm demented)
And after that have his balls shreeded from his crotch BWAHAHAHAA (I know I'm demented)
Are you going to review the actual chapter?
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It's fine now. Creepy as fuck. Hector needs a good kick in the balls. Poor Trucy and to the rest of them, must be really hard right now to cope. It's going to be really stressful.
It will get worse for Phoenix and Apollo as they can't find Trucy for a certain amount of time and start to question if she's still alive or being tortured. And yes the violent Trucy abuse will get worse.
.....wait.... Thank you for the review. Hector needs a good kick in the balls and then a gunshot in both balls.
And after that have his balls shreeded from his crotch BWAHAHAHAA (I know I'm demented)
He definitely needs to suffer, thats for sure.
He should then be cut into loadsa tiny little peices, making sure he stays alive, the fucking son of a bitch.
I HATE HECTOR. HE IS A PRICK.
It was written really well, but poor Trucy!
Why do you enjoy causing her pain in you fanfics?
Its gonna get worse for Apollo and Phoenix - poor them as well! Phoenix has a gun. I hope he uses it. Hector is a knob. And you are vile.
C.Gholy wrote:
Creepy as fuck. Hector needs a good kick in the balls. Poor Trucy and to the rest of them, must be really hard right now to cope. It's going to be really stressful.
It will get worse for Phoenix and Apollo as they can't find Trucy for a certain amount of time and start to question if she's still alive or being tortured. And yes the violent Trucy abuse will get worse.
.....wait.... Hector needs a good kick in the balls and then a gunshot in both balls.
^^Agreed.
kenneth3k1 - you aren't demented! You coulda then said he should be forced to eat the peices.
Mwa ha ha! Now I feel demented!!
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Re: Platinum Skye's Fanfiction - 10/14/09 - Trucy Angst Chap 1
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Why do you enjoy causing her pain in you fanfics?
Its gonna get worse for Apollo and Phoenix - poor them as well! Phoenix has a gun. I hope he uses it. Hector is a knob.
Its gonna get worse for Apollo and Phoenix - poor them as well! Phoenix has a gun. I hope he uses it. Hector is a knob.
Phoenix will use his revolver, won't say when yet.
I just find Trucy to be so innocent, cute, sweet, naive and fun. I just like turning her into a emotional wreck since it takes the angsty past and combined with other events into something very interesting albeit tragic.
Thank you for reviewing.
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look on FF.net then you'll find it. I'm to lazy to copy the actual review here... 
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kenneth3k1 wrote:
I did review look on FF.net then you'll find it. I'm to lazy to copy the actual review here...
look on FF.net then you'll find it. I'm to lazy to copy the actual review here... I noticed that and replied to it. I know you sent a reply back but I'm not in the mood to reply back.
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Keep it up!
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Darkdamacus wrote:
Wow, These are great Keep it up!
Keep it up!Appreciate the review but please give it some detail.
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DerekAMW wrote:
Decided to start writing a Rememberence Day tribute fic, set six months after Phoenix adopted Trucy. The night before and the day will be told through both Phoenix and Trucy's POI's.
Aww! Thats a good idea :) I wanna read!!:)
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