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Author:  Greeny [ Wed Jul 30, 2008 12:11 am ]
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I just finished chapter 9 part 1 and added it to the first post.
It's a big chapter, so I'm dividing it in two. I'll write the next bit
tomorrow. It's also a trick not to break from my patented
POV-switching style. xD
Author:  Madame Sho [ Wed Jul 30, 2008 12:39 am ]
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I believe I may die of a suspense overload if you do not post the next segment relatively quickly.

You don't want my death on your conscience, do you......*ominous laughter*
Author:  Miyuki-chan [ Wed Jul 30, 2008 3:25 pm ]
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That was really cool. I liked the witness testimony Ema gave too.

Quote:
“You found my WHAT on her WHAT?!?”

This made me laugh :will:
Author:  Greeny [ Thu Jul 31, 2008 1:01 am ]
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shojogirl wrote:
You don't want my death on your conscience, do you.....

Of course not! ... But i'm the type to wait until the very last moment so I can
save the day with a good old fashioned mouth-to-mouth.

Quote:
“You found my WHAT on her WHAT?!?”

Was one of my own personal favorite quotes too. ;)

Anyways, part 2 of the chapter 9 is on the first post.
Is it just me or are the parts getting dangerously larger every time?
I think I'm gonna make a shorter one next. :3

Also I'd like to state that any resemblance between hobohodo and the witness is
purely coincidental. (And I was originally planning on giving him a beanie too...
It's just the image I kind of get from him. But he was looking too much of a cheap
copy so I cut that. xD)
Author:  jeti [ Thu Jul 31, 2008 5:16 pm ]
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Apollo sleeps in Trucy's underwear whut? I don't think he'd fit! :apollo-shock:

Anyway, your formatting's getting a little better, but I honestly couldn't read the first chapter because of TEXTWALL. My eyesight's not good enough to handle that. :/ This kind of formatting isn't really a "stylistic" issue, it's more of a grammar issue.

Also, because you mentioned some confusion, PG stands for "Parental Guidance". This story would probably warrant PG-13 or PG-15 (PG-13 being "parental guidance suggested for children under the age of 13" and PG-15 not being an American rating, but this is the internet so whatever.)

So when the police arrived, she was sleeping in her underwear, huh? Lucky police! :hotti:
Author:  Greeny [ Thu Jul 31, 2008 5:49 pm ]
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Don't worry, nothing happens in chapter 1. xD

Quote:
Apollo sleeps in Trucy's underwear whut? I don't think he'd fit!

Lol, I honestly hope he didn't mean it that way. Try not to picture anything. xD

On a side note, the first post was getting a little big and also for
structural reasons I've decided to split the whole thing up into
(estimated) three acts. Also because there's such a sudden
change from a romance story to a courtroom drama.
Now I can also split the rating 'm stuff. I was originally going
to call act 2 'turnabout raep' but decided not to.
Author:  Dragon_One [ Thu Jul 31, 2008 6:43 pm ]
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I've read everything thus far and I've enjoyed every bit of it. Definitely looking forward to the next part!
Author:  Greeny [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 1:24 am ]
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Wow, thanks. Speaking of next parts...

Chapter 10's here! Yay. I added it to the first post as usual.
Author:  Hazri [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 1:34 am ]
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It's not bad. My only complaint is the the way you post it. Look at your last chapter, then look at the last chapter of my Turnabout Reunion. Every time someone speaks, I add another line. Whenever there is a change between speaking and actions, I start a new paragraph. It makes it seem longer, when in reality it's the same length and tidier. You get what I'm saying? It looks all messy when it's all just huge paragraphs.
Author:  Miyuki-chan [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 2:37 am ]
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Franziska seemed so sad, I'm really wondering what the envelope had. :franny:
Author:  Mystic Mina [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 3:55 am ]
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Teehee, I don't mind at all about the appearance, this story is awesome! <3 I'll be keeping an eye on it. ;3
Author:  Shiki Tohno [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 4:22 am ]
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Nice so far. And I know for a fact what's inside the envelope. =p
Author:  Inquisitor Amakiir [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 4:24 am ]
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Apollo was looking at me with a face saying ‘oh god you’re just in time’. Franziska’s face said somethingmore along the lines of ‘not you again’. The judge just gazed at me in surprise.

Made
Of
Win.

Anyways, I'm liking where this story is heading. Keep up the good work.
Author:  Mystic Mina [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 4:38 am ]
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DominicanZero wrote:
Nice so far. And I know for a fact what's inside the envelope. =p


Damn you. :<

I'll have to check AFTER work tomorrow.... Urgh. Noes...
Author:  Legacy [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 5:14 am ]
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HOLY CRAP.

BEST FANFIC EVER.

And I'm beginning to like Apollo/Trucy, but it's just SO WRONG. ^.^;
Author:  (Witty Name Here) [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 11:13 am ]
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Hazri wrote:
It's not bad. My only complaint is the the way you post it. Look at your last chapter, then look at the last chapter of my Turnabout Reunion. Every time someone speaks, I add another line. Whenever there is a change between speaking and actions, I start a new paragraph. It makes it seem longer, when in reality it's the same length and tidier. You get what I'm saying? It looks all messy when it's all just huge paragraphs.


Was it really necessary to inflate your ego a little more when you could've just said to start a new paragraph for every change in mood/dialogue? I don't intend to come off as rude but it really peeves me when writers pimp themselves out in such a way.

In other news...

I've been following this story since it started, and I must say that I'm impressed, especially by how smoothly the moods and situations change from lighthearted and fluffy to dark and sober. On the whole, it's a wellrounded story and I look forward to reading more.
Author:  Hazri [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 11:25 am ]
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(Witty Name Here) wrote:
Hazri wrote:
It's not bad. My only complaint is the the way you post it. Look at your last chapter, then look at the last chapter of my Turnabout Reunion. Every time someone speaks, I add another line. Whenever there is a change between speaking and actions, I start a new paragraph. It makes it seem longer, when in reality it's the same length and tidier. You get what I'm saying? It looks all messy when it's all just huge paragraphs.


Was it really necessary to inflate your ego a little more when you could've just said to start a new paragraph for every change in mood/dialogue? I don't intend to come off as rude but it really peeves me when writers pimp themselves out in such a way.

I don't see how that suggestion is "pimping" myself. I was just offering a friendly suggestion. Don't flame me if you don't a agree. Instead, just politely state you don't agree, instead of going off at me. I apologize for his behavior, Greeny. The story is fantastic! I'm now a fan.
Author:  Greeny [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 11:34 am ]
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Ah don't worry about it. Just - both of you - don't start argueing in my fanfic thread. ;)

Also you can probably understand it'd be kinda weird if I'd change writing style in the
middle of my story, wright? xD
Author:  (Witty Name Here) [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 11:37 am ]
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Hazri wrote:
(Witty Name Here) wrote:
Hazri wrote:
It's not bad. My only complaint is the the way you post it. Look at your last chapter, then look at the last chapter of my Turnabout Reunion. Every time someone speaks, I add another line. Whenever there is a change between speaking and actions, I start a new paragraph. It makes it seem longer, when in reality it's the same length and tidier. You get what I'm saying? It looks all messy when it's all just huge paragraphs.


Was it really necessary to inflate your ego a little more when you could've just said to start a new paragraph for every change in mood/dialogue? I don't intend to come off as rude but it really peeves me when writers pimp themselves out in such a way.

I don't see how that suggestion is "pimping" myself. I was just offering a friendly suggestion. Don't flame me if you don't a agree. Instead, just politely state you don't agree, instead of going off at me. I apologize for his behavior, Greeny. The story is fantastic! I'm now a fan.


I wasn't flaming you, first of all. Did I personally insult you? Call you a loser or another derogatory term? It had no malicious intent. I said that I didn't intend to come off as rude, and what do you know, you interpret it as just that anyway.

Don't apologize for my behavior. I revoke nothing, and you are not responsible for my own actions.

I refuse to argue any further. I'm leaving.

If you want me to delete my posts, Greeny, I'll gladly do so.
Author:  Hazri [ Fri Aug 01, 2008 11:39 am ]
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Greeny wrote:
Ah don't worry about it. Just - both of you - don't start argueing in my fanfic thread. ;)

Also you can probably understand it'd be kinda weird if I'd change writing style in the
middle of my story, wright? xD

I apologize for that argument. No harm done? Anywho, I changed my format at chapter 4 (I think) and it didn't feel strange to me. You don't HAVE to change your style. It was just a friendly suggestion to make it look tider. :butzthumbs:
Author:  Mystic Mina [ Sat Aug 02, 2008 4:22 am ]
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I think he meant that if he dramatically changes the format smack dab in the middle of the story, it would be kinda strange. But the appearance doesn't really matter, it's the content, right? :D
Author:  Fleggin [ Sat Aug 02, 2008 11:26 pm ]
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I am to tell you that Greeny is banned for a week. He wanted me to tell you all that he will be posting his stuff on "Objection! PW fanfic archive site."
Author:  (Witty Name Here) [ Sun Aug 03, 2008 2:16 pm ]
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Fleggin wrote:
I am to tell you that Greeny is banned for a week. He wanted me to tell you all that he will be posting his stuff on "Objection! PW fanfic archive site."


What?! Why? What is this madness?
Author:  Mystic Mina [ Sun Aug 03, 2008 7:51 pm ]
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Madness? THIS. IS. SPARTAAAAAAAAAAAAA-

If you look at his now locked sprite thread I think you'll know. D:
Author:  Greeny [ Wed Aug 13, 2008 12:31 pm ]
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I'm back! At least with bringing the new forums back they didn't forget my due unban. xD
I've changed the first post - it now links to the page at the Phoenix Wright Fanfic Archive. (Great place)
It simplifies things. The latest chapter is Act 2 Chapter 8, or Chapter 14 total.
Author:  Ninkobra [ Wed Aug 13, 2008 4:08 pm ]
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Just read the last chapter.

Hmm... the plot thickens.

Spoiler:
I just hope this "reason" to have Kristoph's picture in a necklace isn't what I'm thinking... then again, with Kristoph, anything is possible.


Oh, BTW: Happy unbanning, Greenie. [hands over a mysterious pink envelope]
Author:  Greeny [ Wed Aug 13, 2008 5:32 pm ]
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....Are you thinking what I think you're thinking? Oh dear.

What? Pink envelope?
Author:  Greeny [ Wed Aug 13, 2008 11:51 pm ]
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Next chapter is up!
Author:  Greeny [ Sun Aug 17, 2008 12:05 am ]
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*sniffle*

Here I am, trying my best to write something interesting for you guys,
and what do I get? No comments, no feedback, no reviews, no nothing. :(

Oh, before I forget, new chapter.

I guess there's just no place for somebody who writes really
long-going stories. *sob*
Author:  Ninkobra [ Sun Aug 17, 2008 1:05 am ]
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You'll have to excuse me while I laugh:

:uramidn: ... :uramidn: ... :uramidn: ...

That old man's testimony was lol-worthy. Kinda reminds me of Kudo, but with less bird seeds. Is it bad that I'm noticing the contradictions pretty quickly, though?

It would be interesting to see how this turns out.
Author:  Greeny [ Tue Sep 09, 2008 7:14 pm ]
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After a rediculously long time, I've finally decided to get off my lazy ass
and not let this die. Act 2, Turnabout Frame is with this new chapter... Over!

Now let's all pray I can manage to finish act 3.
Author:  Pearl the Barrister [ Sat Oct 04, 2008 2:49 am ]
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As a :minuki: / :odoroki: fan, and also as an eccentric nutcase, I say...
GODDAMMIT EPIC WIN!
Both parts were awesome as hell, the best of any :odoroki: / :minuki: fanfic EVAH, and of almost any fanfics EVAH.
good job! :butzthumbs:
Author:  Greeny [ Sat Oct 04, 2008 12:43 pm ]
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Thanks! I would have never believed anyone would find this after so long. ^_^"
I just hope, maybe, one day, I'll be able to write that third act I was supposed
to write one month ago. XD
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