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Every person want to be loved (A Franziska/Miles one shot)Topic%20Title
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Hi there. I post here a story about my favorite pairing Miles/Franziska.
I know some people call it incest but I don't think in that way most of the time. (However I support too Klavier/Kristoph so... I can like incest!)
I post so a story about them which contain spoilers for Trials and Tribulations case 5. It's a one shot.

Anyway enjoy!^^ :pearl:

Title: Every person want to be loved
Rating: K
Genre: Romance
Summary: Every people on the Earth want to be loved and Franziska von Karma is not an exception. She wants to be loved by the only man who had care about her in her life.
Disclaimer: Characters in this story belong to CAPCOM

Here is the story:

“I... I... I am Franziska von Karma, don’t think I’m going to walk in your shadow forever. Our battle... begins now... so you had better prepare yourself, Miles Edgeworth!”

He had said nothing, he had just stayed there and watched her crying until she had to go to her plane. Then, he left.

Franziska von Karma was sitting in her seat, remembered the scene which has just happened.

Why? Why did she cry?
She knew perfectly why.

“If you say you’re going to quit your walk down the prosecutor’s path... Then, this is where we part ways, Franziska von Karma.”

She was a failure, as her Papa told her all the time. She was imperfect.

So, how someone like Miles Edgeworth could have loved her?

Nobody could.

Her heart was hurting.

*Don’t be ridiculous! You’re a von Karma, you don’t need that kind of affection!* she told to herself.

*I’m perhaps a von Karma, but... I want... to be loved...*

No one had never loved her. Nor her father, nor her sister, and she had never known her mother.

But Miles Edgeworth... he was so soft with her. She always remember him at her sides. He had always been in her life. There was no memories which he wasn’t in.

*Miles Edgeworth...*

She had always loved him. She never knew why.
But she couldn’t tell that she loved him. She couldn’t. Because she was a von Karma, and a von Karma has to be perfect, a von Karma does not need to love.
So she had hidden her love in her heart and, that day, she swore to never let it leave her heart.
She had kept her promise. She never told him.
But doing this was more and more difficult each day. She was afraid that the words would one day escape from her mouth, without her will.

When she saw him coming back, she had to run away because of that fear. Temptation had been too strong.
Again, she had run away.

Her heart was hurting. She had only one thing to do: sleeping. She will be better after.
She softly closed her eyes.

***
The year was passing slowly.
She has been corresponding with Adrian Andrews for three months now.
They talked about different things and one day, the blond woman asked her:

“Say Franziska, do you have a boyfriend?”

“A boyfriend?”

“You don’t know what it is?”

“Please Adrian Andrews, I’m not a fool, I know what a boyfriend is!”

“So do you have one?”

“No.”

“Really? Oh I was practically sure that the answer would have been yes... So you don’t love anyone?”

“No...”

Her heart was hurting.

“Really? You don’t love anyone?... ...Even Mr Edgeworth?”

Franziska von Karma scoffed. How did... this girl... know that?

“Franziska?”

“He’s just a little brother for me, nothing else.”

“Franziska, can I ask you another question?”

“Of course you can!”

“Do you take me for an idiot?”

“Huh?”

“I assure you I’m not an idiot. I KNOW you love him.”

Franziska von Karma was choked.

„ You what?“

„I know you love him. When I saw you and him after the trial, you were watching him with so much love in your eyes, that was... well... revealing.”

“Adrian you...”

She couldn’t say any other word. If Adrian knew it, so maybe Miles Edgeworth knew too.
Maybe all the people who had seen them together knew it too.

She was scared. That was not possible.

“Franziska?”

The German girl answered difficultly:

“Adrian... do you think... he... could have understand?”

“No. I’m sure of that.”

“B...But...you...”

“Franziska, I’m a woman! It’s simple for a woman to understand how another woman feels!”

Ah? It was not simple for her.

“Franziska, do you want some help?”

She didn’t respond but Adrian understood a “yes”.

“If you want him to understand how you really felt, you have to, first, stop calling him “little brother”.”

“And if I don’t want him to know?”

“Why not?”

“I... d...don’t really know...”

“Every person on the Earth want to be loved, Franziska.”

The young woman fall quiet.

*Every person want to be loved?*

She breathed softly.

“Adrian...Thank you...”

“You’re welcome Franziska. Oh, and when you stop calling him your little brother, then kiss him. I’m leaving you with your thoughts, now!”

The blond woman hung up.

Franziska went to her bedroom and fall on her bed.

She closed her eyes.

Every person want to be loved Franziska.

***
A cold night in February, she was woken up by her cell phone. She didn’t verify the caller ID.

“Hello?” she said with a tired voice.

“Franziska! It’s Miles Egdeworth.”

She sat in her bed, totally awoken now.

“What do you want Miles Edgeworth?”

“Listen, Phoenix Wright had just taken a case and he need a prosecutor he’s familiar with. So I called you.”

“Why a prosecutor he’s familiar with?”

“Well... It’s a strange case, and he needs your help. Please.”

“... Very well. I’m coming in America. Tell him.”

“Thank you, Franziska.”

***
The case was finished. Finally, Phoenix Wright wasn’t the defense attorney. It had been her little brother. She was not sure about why he hadn’t told her, but she was not angry. She was happy. It was so strange.
She was happy to be there, in that restaurant, facing him, eating that not very good food.

Then it was time. Wright, Maya, Pearl, Scruffy, the waitress girl, that painter, him and her left the restaurant to go back to their respective houses.

She began to go back at her house when Miles Edgeworth joined her.

He was silent for a minute. Then he began to speak. Her heart was in peace. It wasn’t hurting.

“I want to thank you and apologize for my behavior. I know it would have been better to tell you the truth but I was afraid that you didn’t want to come here after telling you. I’m sorry. And I want to thank you for not reveling my true identity to the Court.”

“Miles Edgeworth, that was nothing. After all you’re my...”

She stopped.

“If you want him to understood how you really felt, you have to, first, stop calling him “little brother.”

*But does I really want him to understand?

Of course! Every person want to be loved Franziska!*

“Franziska?”

She turned her head toward him.

“Sorry,” she said, ” where was I ?”

“You were saying it was nothing and that, after all, I was your little brother.”

She looked at him.

“No, I didn’t say that you were my little brother!”

“What? But you’re always telling me that I am... I do not understand!”

“Miles Edgeworth! You are NOT my little brother!”

“Franziska?! Are you sure you are ok?”

“And when you stop calling him your little brother, then kiss him.”

“Are you drunk, Franziska? That would explain why...”

She suddenly pulled him against her and kissed him full on the lips. She was surprised that he kissed her back, the surprise passed.

They broke off the kiss and stared at each other.

“It was nothing.” said Franziska again, “ It was a pleasure to help you. After all... you’re the man I love...”

He was staring at her. Then he said:

“Do you... really... love me?”

She nodded.

“Not as your little brother, but as a man?”

Again she nodded.

Softly he placed one of his hand on her cheek and whispered:

“I... love you too, Franziska...”

They both closed their eyes as they kissed each other again.

Adrian was right. Every person on the Earth want to be loved.

Love was not a failure. It was a Gift. Love was a perfect feeling.

Miles and Franziska came back to the house of Miles after this beautiful moment.

The End

I hope you liked it!

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:gant: Loved it ^_^
Well done. I m a big fan of :franny: :edgy: so I absolloutely love this fic.
I like how you had Adrian help Franziska. And the way you really kept in character.
Just one little problem. "Every people want to be loved" should be "Every person wants to be loved" That makes more sense. But that's all. Other than that well written, and I like love it :edgy: :franny:
well done :gant-clap2: It was a plesure to read ^_^
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Thank you so much! I've just corrected!
I will write more but I'm a little busy with school and all so I'll write but maybe not now!
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A very quick read, with a heartwarming--if somewhat predictable--ending. Fortunately, your English was good enough for me to not have any problems, though there were clear grammatical errors, as Purple Angel pointed out. It's probably because it was a oneshot, which allowed less room for deeper insight into Franziska's character, but it felt very simple and somewhat surface-level to me--of course, it might also be that you're less familiar with English than most of the authors here, which can make depth difficult in a story. I think this story has the potential to be fleshed out; as things stand, I feel as though it raced hastily through the course of a year, with Franziska's transformation feeling almost instantaneous. You still carried the plot through properly, though, so you have my praise for that.
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Thank you for reviewing.
I know for the grammatical errors and I'm sorry.
I've understood what you find bad and I thank you, your review will help for another stories, in the future.
Thank you!
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Part of this also stems from my own personal tastes; I tend to favor longer stories that span several chapters over oneshots.
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Well I'm still writing a story about that pairing, in French. I have promised to English friends to translate it but only when I finish it. There is still two chapters to write before the end but after that, I will translate it and I will post it.

I can understand that some persons don't really like one shot. Myself, I prefer story to one shot but I think that write a one shot is a good training (for someone like me, particularly!).
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I think it's still really good as a one-shot :maya:
can't wait for those other stories either, it must be hard writing fanfics in a different language - I could never write a fanfic in french :meekins:
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Thank you but you know, I like writing in English, I consider this as a training and I like translate story, too.
Besides, English is the language you have to talk, so... Well you understand my point of view. More you have trainings, better it is! And don't worry, French is a difficult language. French students do more grammatical errors in French than in English! I can completely understand that it's very difficult! Maybe more than be French and write stories in English!

For those other stories, it would be the long story I'm still writing. Just let me get some rest and finish it in French. ^^
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Please don't let me rush you! Take as much time as you need ^_^.
I can't wait ^_^ :yuusaku: no wait.
I can wait ^_^ :shoe:
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Thank you!
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Very cute! I found it funny that you and I both started our fanfics on Fran/Miles around the same time :edgy: I do agree that it was a little rushed, but it was a oneshot, and oneshots are rather difficult for a pairing such as Fran/Miles unless you're doing one when they're already together.

I'll be very excited to see more of your work. I've been looking for more Fran/Miles around here, and it's good to see some more :odoroki:

About French: I happen to be learning French in school. I'm doing okay, but the grammar is a little difficult sometimes. The conjugations and stuff are fine; it's things like 'que' or 'de' (especially de! I never know when to use it!) that mess me up. :sadshoe:

I'd actually like to read it in French; I think it will help me learn more about grammar structure (even if there are mistakes :edgy: ) and more vocab.
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Thank you so much!
Actually I've read your stories and I will write a review for the next chapter of "Flawless Achievement".
For my long story about them here is the link >> http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4663275/1/A ... perfection

I will translate it in English in one week or two, so if you don't understand...^^
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nice story! i think it was pretty good as a one-shot about franziska and edgeworth, as its quite a deep pairing and you covered it briefly but effectively! ^^
i love the :franny: / :edgy: pairing as well! i've never really thought of it as incest, though - although i suppose they are sort of brother and sister - but who cares!! :redd:
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Thank you very much! Really!
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That was really good for a one shot, especially for someone who's primary language isn't English. And that's a great compliment since half of fanfiction.net makes me want to hang myself. But yeah, General Luigi prety much summed up any problems I felt when I read it.
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Indochine Ramera wrote:
Thank you so much!
Actually I've read your stories and I will write a review for the next chapter of "Flawless Achievement".
For my long story about them here is the link >> http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4663275/1/A ... perfection

I will translate it in English in one week or two, so if you don't understand...^^


Why, thank you! I hope you liked them. And I'd love to see you comment on "FA".

I've began to read it, but I need to wait till the weekend. I don't have the time now. I understand the main stuff, I think, but maybe it will force me to look at a dictionary, so that will help... :edgy:
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That was really good for a one shot, especially for someone who's primary language isn't English. And that's a great compliment since half of fanfiction.net makes me want to hang myself. But yeah, General Luigi prety much summed up any problems I felt when I read it.


Thank you so much. Glad you liked

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Indochine Ramera wrote:
Thank you so much!
Actually I've read your stories and I will write a review for the next chapter of "Flawless Achievement".
For my long story about them here is the link >> http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4663275/1/A ... perfection

I will translate it in English in one week or two, so if you don't understand...^^


Why, thank you! I hope you liked them. And I'd love to see you comment on "FA".

I've began to read it, but I need to wait till the weekend. I don't have the time now. I understand the main stuff, I think, but maybe it will force me to look at a dictionary, so that will help... :edgy:
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No worries, take all the time you need!
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