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| Author: | FirexxxSaber [ Thu Jan 15, 2009 9:08 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Consequences of Change {Phoenix/Franziska} |
Consequences of Change Rating: K+ Genre: Romance Pairing: Phoenix/Franziska Spoilers for Apollo Justice, kind of... Spoiler: |
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| Author: | GDM [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 12:39 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Consequences of Change {Phoenix/Franziska} |
I think that it is great! Edit: I agree with the others that posted here; the / fics are very rare. While that pairing is not my OTP, I do think that it could work out........ eventually.Please continue writing, we need more / !
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| Author: | Wanacoba [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 1:29 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Consequences of Change {Phoenix/Franziska} |
This is it!!! Finally I have my dream come true! YAAYY!! Well anyway I loved this, you don`t know how much have I waited for a fic that involved a pairing between Nick and Franny. And I tell you GDM said : Continue! Now for a real review: I liked the way you handled the attitude of Franziska and the way she was after 7 years. Being mature enough to recognize the role that Miles and Phoenix played in the development of her career and life as a prosecutor. You did good cause we`ve not seen Franziska for a long time and you created a good "way to be" for her. As for Nick it was good (even though the effort must have been a lot less than in Franziska`s character) you had a starting point to begin with thanks to GS4 and on top of all things I loved the last lines of dialogue: "Don't think I only changed in a bad way... There's one way I changed for the better." "And what way would that be, Phoenix Wright?" Franziska asked. "I finally have the courage to do this." Leaning in, Phoenix kissed her tenderly on the lips. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It was beautiful but just too sudden and I would have liked a few lines after the finishing kiss that we all find so cute in this fics of Hate turning to love (like the Ema/Klavier ones). I don`t know but something like: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- She was up to hitting him with all of her strength but... she just couldn`t. And said: "I kept that card for the exact moment we would meet each other again. For the moment you were prepared to see it." Now happily for being able to release the feelings she sealed for so long, hugging the man that she hated she said: "And I have changed for the better too... now I`m strong enough to say... I love you." ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- But that`s just my opinion (anyway tell me if it was good ending )The fic you made is a very good one. |
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| Author: | DarknessLord [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 3:26 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Consequences of Change {Phoenix/Franziska} |
I liked it, I really did, Phoenix/Fran fics are tragically rare. The one thing is, it seemed kinda rushed, and the transitions felt a little rough. I think by adding in more details and some pauses in the action (even with Fran being so high-strung I think this is doable) to give each point and mood transition the attention it deserves could do wonders to future works or to a revision of this one. ^.^ However, that's just my opinion on the matter, and I still found it enjoyable, so you can take my advise or leave it. |
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| Author: | FirexxxSaber [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 7:35 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Consequences of Change {Phoenix/Franziska} |
Yeah, I was never the best with romance scenes. ^^; I'm thinking of revising this and adding more details... Thans for the reviews, everyone! |
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