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"Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
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Author:  Wanacoba [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 4:10 am ]
Post subject:  "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
Title:Godot 107.
Author: I think me... GrayGodot.
Rating: I don`t know a thing about ratings XD.
Genre: Drama.
Status: Complete (oneshot)
Pairing: Godot/Mia (implied)
Summary: Coffe is not just that full of caffeine drink you have in the morning, it is that dark burning future that is waiting for us, and even the great Godot knows that.
WARNING: Major T&T spoilers.

Special thanks to FirexxxSaber for editing! hope you leave a coment soon!

Spoiler:
Early in the morning I awoke with a sad vision of the world; I didn`t know who I was. I got up and went straight to the kitchen. I spotted on the table a can of coffee that made me remember everything.

“I'm Diego Armando! Well, now I`m Godot. I like coffee, and the women I love is dead. I`m dead too, but I couldn`t follow her... I wish I could.”

That information wasn't too useful; it just made my morning awful.

While waiting for the water to boil, I remembered that I was going to have my first case today, and my opponent was the man who didn`t do anything to save Mia, the man who made my resurrection from hell itself. Without her there`s only revenge for me... I swear that Trite guy is going to pay the price for his actions! Or lack of them.

The water finally boiled, keeping my mind from thinking of things that hurt me. While combining different coffees I made Godot 107. I knew that my day would be like this coffee. What surprised me was the fact that it had good flavor all along, but at the end of the cup, it was very bitter. It didn`t matter: “Ha!... Just a coincidence,” I said.

As I entered the Courthouse everyone looked at me, whispering things about my looks, or about the rumors that my fame had created. I was only thinking about Trite, and how it would feel to beat him.

As I took my first sip of coffee of the trial, I knew that today was going to be a day to remember; the day I beat Phoenix Trite in Mia`s name. What would I do after that?

Who knows? Even I`m a little bit worried about the future, but only fate will tell.

You always have to trust in fate... That`s one of my rules.


Hope you liked what you`ve just read! Leave good coments pointing both the good things and the mistakes I made. :hobohodo:
Author:  _Krystal_ [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 5:45 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
This is really good! It's a little sad, but I really like how you told the story of Godot blend 107!
Author:  Purple Angel [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 6:40 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
this is really good :maya:
can't wait to see what happens next...
I didn't know there was such a thing as canned coffee. wow.
I love how everything is written from Godot's view and how you display his thoughts :godot: And how you included the fact that everyone looked at him and whispered. Who wouldn't???
Keep up the good work :shoe:
Author:  General Luigi [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 7:32 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
When an author comments on your work, return the favor. That's one of my rules.

Moving on, there were a few grammatical errors, though I was still able to understand this little excerpt properly. I think of it as an excerpt because it doesn't feel as though it really had a beginning and end, but rather as though it is part of a much larger story.

Another issue is that it felt rather surface-level to me. I felt as if the plot sped along without really delving into Godot's mindset and thoughts. Even a tiny scene like this has the potential for a deep journey into Godot's mind, so I encourage you to take advantage of that potential.
Author:  vio55 [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 8:26 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
Hmm... This was alright. I liked the Godot 107 thing, and how you described what others were doing when Godot entered the courtroom for the first time as, well, Godot instead of Diego. It seemed to be a little short and OOC for Godot, though. I can't quite see Godot saying what he did in the beginning, and like General Luigi said, it could have gone much more in-depth.

Purple Angel wrote:
this is really good :maya:
can't wait to see what happens next...


It's a one-shot. It's completed already, unless the author changes his mind.
Author:  Pearls1975 [ Fri Jan 16, 2009 11:28 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
:godot:

General Luigi wrote:
When an author comments on your work, return the favor. That's one of my rules.

Another issue is that it felt rather surface-level to me. I felt as if the plot sped along without really delving into Godot's mindset and thoughts. Even a tiny scene like this has the potential for a deep journey into Godot's mind, so I encourage you to take advantage of that potential.


I have to agree with General Luigi. It was good, but it's like a catepillar in a cucoon, it has the potential to be so much more!


:pearl:
Author:  Wanacoba [ Sat Jan 17, 2009 3:19 am ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
My apologies fornot having such a good grammar, I knew from the beginning that this would happen. I knew it!

About what you said General Luigi you deserve my thanks for the review you gave me and I`m deeply sorry for my mistakes! About the duration I wasn`t aware that someone would like it enough to ask me for a next chapter!
Going back to your words General : the way I moved along the story I hope you understand this is my first GS fanfic so I was nervous and made those mistakes in my grammar, and maybe it was too short or too quick, that`s it! Quick is the word. Cause I see your point, I could have gone deeper in Godot`s mind but maybe I just forgot how Godot`s mind is or the suffering he was putted through. Those two last points were a good way to get a better fic.

I`ll think about you words Purple Angel, and about the canned coffe I meant this:

Spoiler:
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XD but anyway I`m grateful for everyones kind and supportive words. I love you think this has potential. I never was so honest in saying this:

Thank you so much!
Author:  vio55 [ Sat Jan 17, 2009 3:30 am ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
Hmm. If you plan on writing more fanfiction for Ace Attorney, I'd be willing to beta for you to help avoid these kinds of mistakes in the future.

Just PM me if you're interested.
Author:  Wanacoba [ Sat Jan 17, 2009 4:49 am ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
Thanks for the advice Vio. If I manage to come up with something I`ll remember you.
Author:  Purple Angel [ Sun Jan 18, 2009 4:21 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
vio55 wrote:
Hmm... This was alright. I liked the Godot 107 thing, and how you described what others were doing when Godot entered the courtroom for the first time as, well, Godot instead of Diego. It seemed to be a little short and OOC for Godot, though. I can't quite see Godot saying what he did in the beginning, and like General Luigi said, it could have gone much more in-depth.

Purple Angel wrote:
this is really good :maya:
can't wait to see what happens next...


It's a one-shot. It's completed already, unless the author changes his mind.


oohhhh!
sorry (I can be very stupid at times)
I haven't read many fanfics so I didn't know :payne: I just thought it would be nice if you continued it... (like skip the trial just add the bit at the end then write about what Godot did after it. :godot:
e.g talk about how he lost, how ashamed he felt. How he refued all the other cases, and how in anger he smashed the coffee mug or something.. )

Gray Godot wrote:
My apologies fornot having such a good grammar, I knew from the beginning that this would happen. I knew it!

About what you said General Luigi you deserve my thanks for the review you gave me and I`m deeply sorry for my mistakes! About the duration I wasn`t aware that someone would like it enough to ask me for a next chapter!
Going back to your words General : the way I moved along the story I hope you understand this is my first GS fanfic so I was nervous and made those mistakes in my grammar, and maybe it was too short or too quick, that`s it! Quick is the word. Cause I see your point, I could have gone deeper in Godot`s mind but maybe I just forgot how Godot`s mind is or the suffering he was putted through. Those two last points were a good way to get a better fic.

I`ll think about you words Purple Angel, and about the canned coffe I meant this:

Spoiler:
Image


XD but anyway I`m grateful for everyones kind and supportive words. I love you think this has potential. I never was so honest in saying this:

Thank you so much!


Yay! :godot:
Oh that's what you meant by canned coffee. I was imagining a coco-cola can with coffee inside :payne:
Author:  Wanacoba [ Mon Jan 19, 2009 1:32 am ]
Post subject:  Re: "Godot 107" Godot fanfiction by GrayGodot.
I`ll think about it. :phoenix: Thanks for the great support even if it is my first work.

You`ll have to wait until I come up with something that makes sense.
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