Phoenix Wright/Miles Edgeworth fanfiction now with 20% more parsnips! What.

You can read my story in progress which is now complete! It can be found here.

I would really appreciate any feedback because I'm a newbie at writing fanfics.

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Hi (: I know this thread is several weeks old, but I saw that you never got any replies, which isn't cool at all!! so I hope it's okay for me to reply now. and I'm sorry that this is so long!! I wanted to make it thorough since nobody else has posted yet ):

I'm not a pro writer by any means (I'm only just starting my first Ace Attorney fic, haha, & I've only written 4 for other fandoms. I mostly write poetry, fffff) but I hope I can give good feedback anyway!

Let me start off by saying that this is very enjoyable! Sweet and heartfelt. It's great that there was substance to the story other than them crushing on each other, which is what lots of P/E fics do (not like that's a bad thing, but it's refreshing to see something different). I enjoyed the bit about the paparazzi & tabloid article, for example! And the fact that you included Maya. I really liked the chapter with her in it. (:
It's also good that you took them through the "established friends" phase BEFORE the "possibly something more" phase, instead of the whole "We're bitter rivals! Let's make out!" thing. The ending definitely surprised me, though! I just knew that Phoenix was going to convince Edgeworth to stay, haha. but it's great that you didn't take that route! Your ending was much more believable & quite touching in its own right. A+++ :D

You had some really cute & clever moments, here are some that I liked!


now a tiny bit of advice (: I REALLY hope I don't sound pretentious or rude! like I said, I'm DEFINITELY not an expert or anything, but I hope I can be somewhat helpful anyway.



please don't take any of that critique the wrong way! You are very talented, so I was just pointing out little nitpicky things, haha.

it's great that you posted this on C-R. P/E is such a popular pairing, but it rarely gets posted in this forum, for some reason! Have you tried fanfiction.net? it's a much more heavily populated site, so you might want to go there for more reviews! the uploading process is pretty confusing though :/

You definitely deserve more feedback on this! It was very cute. if you ever write more, you should post again! good luck.

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