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I live in England but i think alot of people in this forum live in America so I'll update it in American date with the day and the month switched around.

Title: Mia Fey - The Story
Author: Missile. x
Spoilers: All the way through to T&T
Summary: Mia Fey's life with all the bits the game doesn't mention. Made up. By Me.
Starting of with her first day at the Grossberg criminal defense law firm.
Genre: Drama/Romance
Pairings: Mia/Diego
Chapters: On-going
Status: On-going and in-progress


Authors notes:
What I write is just fiction. Sorry if i get some things wrong and there are contradictions, feel free to point them out but no stupid things please.
I've tried hard to keep Mia (especially) and all the other charecters in charecter, sorry if you think i missed the boat. Like i said feel free to tell me about that too. I hope Diego doesn't come across as too sexist and Mia too up tight.
Not all of the chapters will be about Mia as she is dead for alot of the time and I don't really want to write about Mia-sat-up-in-heaven-watching-Phoenix-do-fierce-battle-in-court as that would get pretty boring and be very difficult to write.
Anyway onto the story, hope people enjoy and constructively reveiw.

The story will be split into different parts so represent different Era's of her life (Eg.When she's at Grossberg's law office = Part 1)

Credit to Thibaroo Flufflefox for proofreading some of the chapters. Thank youu :maya:




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Part 1

Chapter one
Mia's first day at Grossberg Law Offices - Part 1

Mia brushed her soaked fringe out of her eyes and took a deep breath to calm herself as she stood in the foyer of “Grossberg Law Offices.” The deep breath had not worked, for she still felt as tense and nervous as she had before, but she knew that there was no turning back now.

My first day at an actual law firm, she thought to herself as she waited near the reception desk. I can’t believe I’m finally here! I guess all that hard work really did pay off! She leaned on the black marble counter and rested her chin on her palm, waiting for the receptionist to notice her. As she glanced up, she noticed that a young blonde receptionist was in fact busy talking to a tall man wearing a bright red shirt with a black striped waistcoat over the top. They appeared to be having a conversation about the weather. Mia edged closer hoping that they might notice her, and perhaps the receptionist would get on with her job, but instead they just continued chatting.

“Yes, you’re completely right, the weather is truly dreadful. However, I must say being greeted by you, Penny, has certainly brightened my spirits,” the man said in a deep and, well, manly voice, now also resting on the counter leaning closer to the now blushing receptionist.

She giggled and replied, “Oh Mr. Armando, is there anything I can get you before you head upstairs to your office?”

Mia saw him flash Penny a charming smile and reply, “Well…” and after a second's pause, continue, “no…it’s fine.” He attempted to pick up the papers that lay on the counter but Penny had already grabbed his arm.

“Go on, Mr. Armando. Whatever it is I really don’t mind getting you it.”

“Please, call me Diego… I don’t suppose you could get me a coffee, black of course, black as a starless night?”

This seemed to prove too much for the receptionist as she now swooned and began to gulp for air. “A-anything you want… Mr. A- I mean Diego.”

Mia was now seething as Mr.Armando leaned a little closer towards Penny and lowered his voice, but only a little, so Mia could still hear it.

“You know… I’ve only been working here for a few months and yet I feel as if you’re already my favorite person here.” And with that he winked at Penny, picked up his papers, and turned around taking a step toward his office before doing a double take when he saw Mia.

She scowled at him, feeling outraged that she had been forced to wait all this time while he flirted with the receptionist, but her scowl did not at all have the effect she had hoped for, as instead of returning it he looked her up and down and smiled out of the corner of his mouth smugly. He winked again and walked straight past her leaving her angrier than ever.

Proceeding towards the receptionist who had at last seemed to notice her, Mia once again took a deep breath and started to say “Hi, I’m Mia-“

But the receptionist had not yet recovered from her exciting conversation with Mr. Armando, ignoring what Mia had said and cutting across her with- “He’s so…”

What the receptionist thought Mr. Armando was, Mia didn’t find out (Mia came up with many different adjectives to discribe him, but in the end stuck with the tamest one which was “unprofessional”).

Instead of finishing the receptionist's sentence with her own word, Mia just raised her eyebrows and continued her own interrupted sentence, “Mia Fey, I’m Mr. Grossberg's new apprentice.”

“Oh…” Mia saw that Penny had finally realized what Mia had been saying and snapped out of her daydream. “Oh! Ah, yes of course… I’ll just get you Mr. Arm- I-I mean Mr. Grossberg.”

As she saw Penny disappear through a door in the back, Mia drummed her fingers on the counter, now feeling very impatient. So far this wasn’t turning out as well as she had hoped. She had worked so hard to get to work at an actual law firm and had been so pleasingly surprised when she had got the apprenticeship, but how was she going to find out what had happened to her mother when she working with such annoying and smarmy people?

After a moment Penny returned with a professional smile, and she beckoned for Mia to follow her through the door that Mr. Armando had walked through previously.

“Horrible weather outside, isn’t it?” Penny asked, making conversation. “Well, I can actually imagine you already knowing that,” she laughed, after looking at Mia’s drenched appearance.

Deciding that first impressions of people could be wrong, Mia nodded and replied “Well, when I left my flat it wasn’t raining.” Now Mia herself looked at her appearance in a passing mirror. “Ugh! I look such a mess… and on my first day too!” she exclaimed while plucking at her soaking wet suit.

“You… you don’t look that bad,” Penny squirmed, clearly lying.

“Thanks, but I know I do really.” Mia attempted to tidy herself up a little, wiping smudged mascara from under her eyes and running her hand through her messy hair.

The receptionist stopped for a moment and then lead Mia through a door which Mia expected to be Marvin Grossberg's office, but instead, much to her surprise, was a girl’s bathroom.

“I have some makeup remover for that mascara so you can take it off and redo it… And here, I also have a brush.” She handed over the objects from her handbag and Mia got to work quickly. When she had finished she concluded that she looked presentable, at least having neat makeup and hair.

“Thank you so much,” she said, and meaning it too.

“It’s fine, I would hate for your first day here to be a bad one.” Penny smiled as they left, turned down another hallway, passed a door with a golden plaque reading “Robbert Hammond- attorney at law” and then finally stopped at the end of the corridor in front of another plaque reading “Marvin Grossberg- attorney at law.”

“Here we are Miss Fey, Mr. Grossberg should be in there waiting for you. Tell me if you need anything.” And with that Penny turned around and walked down the corridor, leaving Mia standing outside the slightly intimidating door. She knocked and waited for a reply.

"Just a minute!” she heard a voice resembling Marvin Grossberg's shout, and then the voice continued to talk to somebody else more quietly, but once again, just loud enough for Mia to hear. Trying to fight the temptation to listen in on the conversation, she closed her eyes and counted to ten. This was a method she used to calm, and in this case, distract, herself. Unfortunately, it did not work. She leaned closer, putting her ear against the door. After all, if they wanted to keep what they were discussing a secret, why would they talk so loudly?

“A convict who’s escaped death row? You’re kidding me, right? Any attorney would have to mad to take that case.” She recognized the voice as Mr. Armando’s.

“That's exactly why I’m not sure that I want to take it,” Mr. Grossberg replied. “But you... you’re good. I’ve heard how well you’ve been doing in your cases and you’re still pretty new here.”

“Grossberg, I’m not stupid. I’m good, I know that, but I’ve looked over the case file. The man could be innocent but there’s no proof. At this point in my career it would be suicide for me to take the case. Sorry.”

“Very well, I can see you’re convinced that you would not win the trial. I will consider the request some more but will likely turn it down.”

The door then burst open without any warning, catching Mia (who had been leaning against it) off guard, pushing her to the floor as Mr. Armando walked out.




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Wow. This is really good. I like Penny, the receptionist.
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Lida Rose: Thanks for the reveiw. It means alot :maya:

Now onto the second part of that chapter 1

Chapter one
Mia's first day-Part 2

Clearly he had been caught a little of guard and had not been expecting to find a young women lying on the floor as he left the office.

“Having a good listen were we?” He said after recovering from shock and finding his smug demeanor again.

She did not reply but felt her cheeks begin to glow red.

He sniggered “Ah well, no harm done. You do work here now.” He offered her his hand to help her up. She took it noticing, for the first time his incredibly tanned complexion. She gulped trying to think of something clever to say but her wit failed her and instead she just came out with a rather lame, stuttered “Thanks.” as he walked off down the corridor.

She knocked again and heard the voice; this time reply “Come in.” Mia turned the door handle a pushed the door entering the office. The first thing she noticed, of course was an incredibly garish, large painting of a man, wearing a wide brimmed hat sitting upon a rock, with a bright orange, glowing sun behind him. She decided she liked the painting, despite it being garish it was also colourful and because of the orange colour scheme seemed to radiate warmth to the also cosy office.

“Ah, Mia sorry about the wait.” Mr. Grosseberg said shocking Mia in that someone had actually apologized for making her wait.

“It’s fine Mr. Grossberg, don’t worry about it.” she said with an honest looking smile on her face.

“I see you got caught in the rain. Hope you’re not to cold to work!” He laughed. Mia had a slight feeling he was only half joking and so assured him-

“N-no, I’m fine! I’ll dry off after all, don’t worry!” though she was actually having to fight back the shivers.

“Good, good…” he trailed off noticing that Mia’s glance has now turned back towards the painting on his wall “I see you’ve noticed my painting?”

How could I not notice it? she thought but instead said “Yes, I like how it almost seems to warm up the office.”

“Why thank you, I’m sorry but it’s not for sale so you can’t buy it...”

Mia had of course merely been commenting on how she liked the painting but decided it was maybe a good idea to act disappointed rather than point out that she didn’t like it that much.. “What a shame.” she said lamely before trying to steer the conversation away from the painting he was so clearly protective over. “So what will I be doing?”

“Well first of all I want you to look over these case files for me, Mr. Hammond who is another one of your colleagues, though he tends to keep to himself and Mr. Armando, who I think you have already met?” He handed her a huge pile of important looking documents. “When you’ve done that I’d like to you to look over who’s in charge of each case and report to them informing them of all the details. If it’s me I’ll probably ask you to tell me if you notice anything about the case for practice when I think you’re ready to take on a case of your own.” he paused “Is…everything ok Ms. Fey?”

Mia once again gulped for air as she looked down at the huge pile of paperwork before her. “Yes. Yes Mr. Grossberg. Just fine, I mean…It seems like an awful lot of work but...hey, that’s why I’m here right?” she said trying to make her voice sound calm and express how she was “Just fine.”

She lifted the pile once more and turned around to ask one final thing “Do I have and office…I was just wondering, It’s fine if I don’t, I’m not expecting one I just wanted to know…that’s all.”
Mr. Grossberg sat up a little and narrowed his eyes moving his moustache from side to side a little. Mia automatically began to regret asking; clearly Grossberg was shocked at an apprentice asking whether they had an office or not.

“Of course you have an office! Where did you think I was going to have you working, the floor in reception?” He let out a mighty laugh. Down the corridor, turn right, go down the small set of stairs and it’s the first door on the left.”

Mia nodded and left the office staggering with the many documents she was holding but once again stopped by something she could not see (due to the pile of documents so high it was covering her eyes).

“Hello behind there, need help with those?” the thing stopping her for walking said. “Why with all those documents, you would be able to listen to people private conversations, how will you manage?”

“I wasn’t listening I was...just leaning against the door.” she replied still unable to see him, though she now knew it was the smug face of Mr. Armando behind the papers.

“Ah yes…sure you were…here let me help you.” He said taking the documents out of her hands and holding them himself “I assume your office is the one on the right when you go up the small set of stairs and turn right to get here?”

Mia did not know as she had now forgotten but decided to nod and follow him wherever he was now heading. Which it turned out was right, down the small set of stairs and the first door on the left. He stopped gestured towards the handle which she promptly opened for him and he quickly dumped the papers onto her new desk.

“Thanks.” she mumbled to him awkwardly.

“No problem.” he replied smirking again. He offered her his hand which she took as he introduced himself “Diego Armando.”

“Mia Fey.” she replied also introducing herself.

“Pleased to meet you…properly Ms. Fey.” He winked, let go of her hand and walked out leaving Mia feeling pretty angry again and this sexist gesture. Every time she was close to accepting him he went and did something annoying like wink at her or made a smug annoying comment.
She looked down at the paperwork and sighed. What a fun first day it had been so far.




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I know it seems cut of at an odd point but when I'd finished the chapter i realised it was too long to post in one go so just kinda halved it.
Hope i didn't go too far off charecter and make Mia get too angry, too quickly. I just assumed that because it says she thinks of Diego Armando as "abit smug" as it says of his profile she would be quickly irritated by him at their first meeting.
I'll post the next chapter, hopefully a little shorter, soon, once i write it.
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Woot! You keep the ball rolling. I could totally picture Mia having a huge stack of paper work that makes it so she can't see anything.
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Chapter two

As the day went on Mia began to accept that this was all she would be doing for the next few weeks at the Grossberg criminal defense law firm and so decided it was probably best if she just got on with it. She had earlier ordered all the paperwork she had into one pile and sorted out which cases where for whom. Much to her annoyance, the biggest pile on her desk was surprisingly for Diego Armando. She thought this odd because from what she had heard so far he was the newest lawyer her (other than herself) and yet seemed to have them most cases. he might be unprofessional towards colleagues she thought to herself looking through the documents But he sure seems to get complicated cases.

As she finished looking at one of Diego’s simpler cases and moved onto the next she felt her eyes scan over some writing that felt strangely familiar to her.

Name: Terry Fawles
Charge: Kidnapping, murder
Sentence: Death penalty
Fugitive movements: After escaping Fawles met with, and then murdered Sergeant Valerie Hawthorne. He was recaptured on Eagle Mountain 8 hours after his escape.
Autopsy report: Stabbed with a knife in the back, died from blood loss between 4 and 5PM.
Extra notes: Threw Dahlia Hawthorne, (14) off the bride into the Eagle River. Was convicted for this 5 years ago. Murder of Valerie Hawthorne is thought to have also taken place here. No decisive Evidence and so witness testimony had to be taken into account. Testimony was by Valeria Hawthorne: the person who confronted him. After confronting him she then arrested Mr. Fawles at the scene. She later testified against him saying that she witnessed Mr. Fawles throw the young victim into the river. Dahlia Hawthorne’s body was never recovered.

Trial to be held on February 16th.

Mia re-read the report and searched her head for where the information sounded familiar from before realizing that she had in fact heard Mr. Grossberg and Mr. Armando discussing it earlier. It seemed like such a complicated case as there was so much that the police did not know about what exactly had happened. She saw a yellow post-it note, stuck to the top of the report reading-

“Think about it-M.G.”

Assuming that the messy scrawl was from her mentor Mr. Grossberg to Mr. Armando she kept it there and decided that it was time to deliver all the files to Mr. Armando ad she had now looked through nearly all of them. She lifted the considerably lighter pile off her desk and went to search for his office. Mia walked quickly up the small set of stairs as her arms began to grow tired from the still heavy smaller pile of case files. Knowing that Mr. Armando’s office was not up the same corridor as Mr. Grossbergs she headed straight on and then turned left now seeing a larger staircase on her right. She climbed it quickly and saw that the name plate read “Diego Armando-Attorney at Law”. She knocked and instantly heard a reply of “Come in”. Mia turned the door handle and entered the room to be greeted by the image of Mr. Armando sitting on his desk playing on a-

“Gameboy?” she asked outraged “I’ve been downstairs working my ass off while you’ve been sitting here playing on a Gameboy?” Mia clapped her hands over her mouth at her sudden out burst and feeling her cheeks, not for the first time glow red.

“Why yes, I believe that I have for a very good reason too. Because I’ve already finished all my work.” he said now oozing smugness “Would you like a go?” he asked raising his eyebrows in mock sincerity and offering her the small compact games console.

What am I now meant to say? she asked herself, she hadn’t even meant to say that out loud. He probably knows that but just enjoys making me squirm. Mia chose to ignore the question and say “I brought you your documents Mr. Armando, here.” she placed them on the desk and turned around to leave.

“Wait, now you’ve got to tell me about them as I look through them.” He said just as Mia pulled at the door.

“Fine.” She said simply and strode back over to the desk.

Feel free to get yourself a chair Ms. Fey” Mr. Armando said gesturing to one in the corner. She dragged it over and picked up the file on top. Incidentally it was the file she had been reading earlier on in her office. “So, what’s the case about? Just the basic details please…”

Basic details? But… she thought about it a moment No, that makes no sense, It’s not basic if there are details right? Deciding to forget about this started but saying-
“Well basically” Mia started, putting extra emphasis on “Basically” then continued “This guy, Terry Fawles escaped from prison and went to meet with the victim Valerie Hawthorne. He wasn’t captured for 8 hours and he was convicted for the murder and kidnapping-"

”Wait…hang on, if I didn’t know better I’d say this was the case that I told Mr. Grossberg, only earlier I wasn’t interested in.” Diego said, cutting across her, more to himself than to Mia.

“Possibly…” Mia knew that it was true as she had heard the conversation herself but did not say anything.

“Well you should know! You were listening in, oh sorry you were just “leaning against the door” weren’t you?” he asked sarcastically.

Feeling quite embarrassed, Mia decided to ignore his comment and thought perhaps it would be a good idea to distract him from his angry rant. “…Mr. Armando, if you don’t mind me asking, why won’t you take the case?”

“Ms. Fey, I’ve already looked carefully through the case file very carefully and escaped death row prisoners plus a lack of decisive evidence plus and 8 hour gap where no one knew where the defendant was equals a lost trial, something that at my stage of the career is not good.”

“Do you even know if the defendant is guilty or not?” she asked.

“Hmm…He might not be but I’d say there’s a very low chance of success.” He read the next page of the report and pushed it towards her, under her nose “See look, there’s evidence against him, a decisive witness testimony. I feel for the poor defense attorney who gets this case pushed onto them."

Mia was outraged “You feel for them do you? Wow, that would imply that you actually have feelings. That man could be innocent and may end up with a sub-standard defense because you were too busy worrying that if you lose the case your win record will be scratched, well I feel for you Mr. Armando!” she yelled all of this before getting up and opening the door, ready to stomp out.

“You…do?” he said clearly puzzled.

“Yes…I do: feel sorry for you if you care about your stupid win record more than saving and innocent life.” and with that she slammed the door leaving Diego Armando alone with his thoughts.




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Hehe kinda ironic as one day Mia will "feel" for him.
Hope you like the next chapter, shorter than the last one.
Enjoy and review?

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I enjoyed it! When you had Mia yell at Diego, I could totally imagine her saying something like that.
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Chapter three

Mia Fey was angry, and that was putting it lightly as she stomped down the stairs, making a rather loud noise as she did so. As she reached the foot of the staircase, she slumped around the corner to gather her raging thoughts.

He’s a lawyer? That mans profession is everything I’ve worked so hard to become. All of that work so that I could have to power to prove people innocent and he’s the second one I come across? That jerk who thinks about no one but himself? Terry Fawles could be innocent for all he knows and yet all that he can think about is his precious win record.

Her head flopped into her hands in desperation because of the betrayal of everything that being a defense attorney meant to her was carried out. Though she had never met the said defendant she could clearly see in her minds eye Terry Fawles (or what she imagined he would look like) being led with a brown sack over his head to the electric chair where she could see picture his painful death as he writhed and screamed he was innocent. She knew what she had to do, guilty or innocent she knew she could not live with herself knowing that she could have saved him. She headed back to her office (feeling considerably better, now she had a plan) grabbed her bag before something distracted her in the corner of her eye; Despite the small amount of paperwork she had done earlier there was still quite a decent sized pile of work.

“Mia…Come on Mia think…” She muttered to herself under her breath, leaning over her desk “What’s more important to you, paperwork or an innocent mans death?” The answer was clear to her as she rushed out the office leaving the desk as crowded as ever.


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“I’d like to speak to Terry Fawles please”

“And who are you to him?” the man in uniform, behind the desk asked.

“Mia Fey” she answered.

“No…you misunderstood me, who are you to him, for example; sister, friend?”

“Oh…erm…potential defense attorney?” this time she made an effort to puff out her chest to show the badge she was so proud of.

The man blushed and muttered something she couldn’t quite hear due to how flustered he was now. Regaining his composure (or attempting to) he walked of and said- “Right this way Ms. Fey”.

Realizing that puffing her chest out probably gave the man the wrong impression she went back to normal and followed the man, trying her best to hide her now bright red cheeks. He lead her into a cell with a statue like security guard standing in the corner and said “Terry with be with you shortly Ma’am”.

Ma’am? You’re older than I am! Mia sat for a while before finally the door opened to reveal the man who she assumed must be Terry Fawles. He was wearing a blue and white stripy long sleeved prison top with a matching hat. He wore a discontented expression on his face (not that Mia really blamed him) as he slumped down onto the chair on the opposite side of the glass.

“Hello, Mia Fey, nice to meet you” she said stretching her hand out to shake his before it hit the glass in between them. “Ugh...sorry about that, you must be Terry Fawles?”

He nodded sadly as if his head was too heavy to lift properly.

She waited for him to say something, when he didn’t she decided it was best to cut to the chase; “I’m here to talk about your case, is there anything you could tell me about-”

“I didn’t do nothing…”

“Uh…well could you tell me what happened?” she asked him gently.

“I said…I DIDN’T DO NOTHING!”

“You’re saying you’re innocent?”

He didn’t reply but a tear slid down his cheek as he stared down into his lap. Mia nodded; his tears said more than words could.

“Then it’s settled; I’ll take your case…err by the way I’m a defense attorney” she laughed nervously before asking- “Is it ok that I take your case?”

Terry nodded, maintaining his somber silence but now Mia could see a tiny glint of hope for him. She would figure everything else out another time; this case was more important than the muddle of other things going on in her life as she bid Terry goodbye and walked out of the visiting room. The details didn’t matter, there would be time for that later.




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It's also pretty short as I think most of the chapter will be.
Hope people like it? (as many people must be reading and not commenting :-p)
By the way can i also clear with anyone who's reading;
I have no idea what lawyers spend their time doing when they're not in court and aren't investigating. I just figured because Mia is new they would have her looking over cases as practise.

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Yup. I like it. It captures Mia perfectly.

I don't know what lawyers do in their spare time either. Sorry.
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Chapter four


Mia returned to the office feeling considerably more contented, after all; she now had a plan. She would figure out what had happened, win the case and show that stupid Diego Armando what being a lawyer was all about. Of course the thing first and for most on her mind was rescuing and innocent Terry Fawles but if she got to prove Diego wrong on the way all the better for her.

As she entered her office and sat down there was a knock at the door.
“Come in”

It was Mr. Grossberg, he did not look happy.

“Mia…I just got the most ridiculous phone call saying that someone in my law firm had taken Terry Fawles case. Have you any idea who that someone could be?” he said to her raising his eyebrow in an angry kind of way.

“…Sir” she began sounding a lot more confident than she really felt “I honestly think I can win…”

“Oh you do, do you? And on exactly what makes you believe that?”

Mia paused, she couldn’t think of anything “Sir…I just have a feeling…I’m sorry I went behind your back on my first day but…please just trust me with this case…it means so much to me, I don’t know why but I feel like this could have a massive impact on my life”.

“Mia, that’s not enough, I’m sorry but that man is pretty much doomed! It would be a serious mistake to take something as risky as this as your first case.”

“I’m sorry Mr. Grossberg , I’ve already said I’ll take it. There’s more to being a lawyer than a win record.”

“Sorry, do you still not understand? Have you not seen who’s prosecuting this trial?” Mia glanced down at the file that lay on her desk.


Prosecutor: Miles Edgeworth


“I…don’t understand. Who’s Miles Edgeworth?” she asked What’s the big deal? she couldn’t help but think, Mia knew she was a good Lawyer, the only reason she could think of for losing the case would be if Terry Fawles was guilty.

“He’s a rookie prosecutor; like you…” This made Mia even more skeptical, one again What’s the big deal? Mr. Grossberg cleared his throat “…Only he’s not any normal rookie, he’s a prodigy; mentored by Manfred Von Karma”

“Manfred Von what now?” she asked, as she had no idea who he was and why Mr. Grossberg seemed to be making such a fuss about her taking a case against a prosecutor, who had Manfred Von thingy as his mentor.

“He’s a German prosecutor, clearly you’ve never heard of him, not one single loss in 40 years as a prosecutor”

“And so you’re saying that this Edgeworth guy will be as good as…Oh I’ve forgotten his name…”

“Not as good but a lot better than who I’d Ideally have as the prosecutor for your first case. Mia…I want you to listen to me; If you take that case you will be committing career suicide

Mia turned her head away as a reasonable voice in her head asked her;

“Why are you taking this case anyway? Because you believe you can win or because you want to believe you can win, to show Mr. Armando up?”

I can win this she thought to herself. “Mr. Grossberg, It’s ok, I’ll be prepared. You’ll see”

“Well if you’ve made up your mind, there’s nothing I can do. After all you have as much right to take and reject cases as any of you co-workers…Good luck…you’ll certainly need it” he said (but muttered the last part under his breath). He walked out shutting the door behind him.

Mia yawned and looked at her watch, Wow, time went really quickly she thought to herself as she saw it was now the end of the day and what a hectic one it had been, she had got her first case! She cleared all the papers on her already messy desk into one pile, vowed to do them tomorrow and picking up her bag on the way walked out of her office.

Just as she nearly reached reception she (not for the first time) walked into something.

“Ah, watch where you’re going!” Mr. Armando yelled out in surprise.

“S-sorry I was somewh- Oh it’s you…”

“Hmm…you’re friendly” he replied sarcastically “I’m guessing you’re about to apologize for shouting at me; your senior earlier”

Mia snorted “I don’t think so, you were out of order!”

“…so you thought you’d show me and do my job for me right? Show Mr. Mean Armando what being a lawyer is all about?”

She coughed nonchalantly “…if that’s necessary…then yes I am. You might be able to sit by and watch an innocent man die but not me”

“Aww, very touching” he gushed but them smirked.

Mia began to walk off to reception.

“See you tomorrow!” he shouted after her “Or wait…perhaps not, you’ll be in the trial won’t you?!”

She turned round lightning fast “What?” Mai asked stunned.

Mr. Armando sniggered “Sorry, didn’t you realize that the trials tomorrow?”

She was too shocked to say anything back, the reasonable voice however, was not;

Mia, what have you got yourself into?




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Chapter five


Mia sighed loudly and buried her head in her arms, slumping over her desk. Tomorrow, tomorrow? How can the trial be then? I-I practically know nothing about the case This thought was on permanent loop hole in her mind as if she couldn’t quite grasp how little time she had to prepare…and then there was the little voice in her head; constantly reminding her You could drop the case…let someone else do it…after all it’s your first day and you’re taking a case that senior attorneys turned down. No one would blame you, you’re just a rookie… She got up and walked out of her living room, biting her lip anxiously as she walked over to the phone in the kitchen.

Picking it up slowly just as she was about to press the first digit; it rang. She quickly caught the phone after dropping it from fright and answered it.

“Hello?” she said nervously hoping it wasn’t her conscience asking her how she could drop the case like this.

“Sis, Is that you?” the voice replied.

“Oh, Maya, it’s you!” Mia said warmly happy to speak to someone who was in no way linked to her law office “How are you?”

“I’m ok I guess…” she paused “But man does it sucks here now without you, I really miss you!”

“Aww, you’ll get used to things as they are soon, if I’m honest it’s strange living here on my own…” she replied soothingly. Secretly Mia felt exactly the same as her sister and hated being away from Maya. She’d always been so close to her sister, especially as their mother had disappeared. Mia had to do her best to be like a mother to her sister (which hadn’t always been easy).

“Mia…Why are you on your own? Why did you leave?” Maya asked sadly.

“Because…listen Maya, don’t you want to know what happened to our mum? I…I just couldn’t see a future there, at Kurian.” though this was true she also had seen what the position of Master had done to her mother and her aunt Morgan. Mia cared too much for Maya to with her argue that way and so had pronounced her position and left to become a defense attorney.

“Yes but…what about the position of Master? It was yours…Why did you give it up?”

Mia paused, she didn’t want to tell her the complete truth, she knew Maya would just promise that that would never happen to them. She knew it was better for them to stay the way things were now; Maya to become the next Master in a couple of years and her to stay in the city and find out what exactly had happened to their mother and why she had disappeared.

“I…I didn’t want it. Maya just believe me; you’ll make a much better Master than I would of. It’s better this way…”

“I don’t see how…But I guess if you’re so sure…” Maya trailed off “So…err how’s everything where you are, wasn’t it your first day today? How did it go?” she continued changing the subject.

Mia groaned “It was terrible! Apparently I’ve committed carrier suicide and on my first day too!”

Maya giggled “How on earth did you manage that?” she asked.

“Don’t laugh! I took this case that no one else would take and now I think I know why no one would take it…”

“Oh…well can’t you back out? It is your first day after all.”

“That’s what I was thinking…but now I can just picture the poor guys face when he finds out no one will defend him and me, the one person who said they would just deserts him because they’re afraid of losing.”

At that moment the door bell sounded, Mia picked up the portable phone and went to answer it.
“Mia if the case is that difficult they shouldn’t have you on it anyway, someone more experienced should take it!” Maya continued to speak as Mia advanced towards the door.

“Yes but no one would and my boss even attempted to dissuade me from it…but I didn’t listen! I’m such an idiot” Mia said as she opened up the door to great (much to her suprise) Diego Armando.

“Well that I completely agree with.” he said smugly.

“Shut up!” Mia said indignantly.

“What? Well sorry I was only trying to help.” Maya said sounding upset.

“No, no I wasn’t talking to you!” She said reassuringly.

“Well who were you talking to? Are you with someone?” Maya asked.

Mia sniggered “I was talking to some moron from my work; he just insulted me, kinda lamely though if you ask me…”

Diego was now leaning against Mia’s door frame smirking and looking generally pleased with himself as he said “Yes and calling me a moron is very original and a fantastic comeback…In fact I should congratulate you on your comeback from earlier as well; “Shut up!” was truly a stroke of genius!”

“I’m guessing you didn’t understand it sinse you’re still talking…” Mia shot back dryly before putting her ear back to the phone.

“Ooh a guy from work eh? And from what I can hear you’re flirting with him as well!”

“Don’t be silly, if you think that’s flirting then you don’t know a lot about it do you?” Mia retorted.

“I know enough to know that’s what you’re doing…Well anyway I should go now, I think I’m disturbing your conversation with...” she paused “...Your boyfriend!” Maya teased, now giggling down the phone.

“You are disturbing me…but not in the way you think you are...” Mia said raising her eyebrow.
She could see from the amused expression on Diego’s face he was enjoying this immensely and clearly could hear what Maya was saying.

“Well anyway...” Maya said, her laughter dying down now “I really should go, I’ll phone you again tomorrow, love you!”

“Bye Maya, love you too.” she said finally hanging up and turning to look at Diego “Now what are you doing here?”

“Hmm…friendly as usual Ms. Fey.” he muttered under his breath before continuing “Why of course I came to see how you were doing with your case.”

“How do you think I’m doing?” she inquired raising one eyebrow exasperatedly.

“Well if I knew the answer to that I wouldn’t be here would I?”

“Mr. Armando, even I’m not too proud to admit I wouldn’t have taken that case If I’d known the trial was tomorrow…I can’t win it…we both know that.” She said sadly.

“Don’t give up so easily, nothing is impossible. All you need to do is believe you can do it. Think how confident you were earlier, before you knew the trail was tomorrow. Nothings changed, you can still do this.”

Needless to say Mia was quite taken aback by Diego’s sudden show of compassion, so much so she turned around and walked away, back to the kitchen so as he wouldn’t see the tears in her eyes. “Th-Thank you.” she said as he followed behind her as she put the phone back onto the hook. “Would you like a drink?” Mia asked him politely, unable to think of anything else to say back to him.

“A drink? Usually I’d say yes without a thought but no, today we have no time. We’ll be too busy!”

“Busy doing what exactly?” she asked, feeling puzzled Is this guy an alcoholic or something? I meant tea, not Whisky….

“Busy figuring out what you’re going to do on your case of course!”




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YAY! AN UPDATE!!! *goes to read as soon as I can*
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YAY! AN UPDATE!!! *goes to read as soon as I can*
Hee, hee...I would've been caught off-guard, too.
This is awesome!
YAY! AN UPDATE!!! *goes to read as soon as I can*
Hee, hee...I would've been caught off-guard, too.
This is awesome!


Thank you! Though I think your the only person who thinks so as you're my only reviewer. Still, the show must go on and it's nice to have someone saying your work is good.


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Chapter Six

“I-I promised her…5 years ago…” a voice echoed around her head “If it ever happens…That we can’t trust each other no more…Then we’re supposed to…drink…bottle…ugh...”

“N-no! Stop the trial! Your honour, we need recess!!” Mr. Edgeworth’s voice shouted from the other side of the court room.

“I…was stupid…Couldn’t…keep…promise…” Terry gasped "So I did it…I drank…this.”

“No! We’re so close, just a little more. I was going to prove your innocence!” Mia yelled out exhaustedly.

“No…don’t want that…Don’t trust self…Maybe kill again…Kill sweet Dahlia…again…” Fawles choked out, clearly in a lot of pain as blood began to poor from his mouth.

“Mr. Fawles!”

“Mr. Ar…Armando…Th-thank you for the…coffee…” Terry fell to floor after coughing out his last sentence.

“MR. FAAAAAAAAWLES!!!” Mia screamed as she awoke from her sleep. It was hardly surprising such a traumatic first case that the events of that day had been on a permanent loop hole around her head. She began to weep a little as her thoughts gathered and she became aware that it had not all been a dream; Terry Fawles had killed himself …and it’s all my fault.

There was a knock on her bedroom door that she only just about managed to answer with “Come in…”

“Kitten, are you crying again?”

She leaned her head forward so her hair covered her face. How could she have forgotten? Diego Armando had insisted on sleeping downstairs incase she needed anything. Mia sniffed “No, I’m…fine”.

He walked over to the bed and sat down next to her while putting his arm around her as she wept “Did you forget? The only time a lawyer can cry is when it’s all over.”

“Then I don’t want be a lawyer anymore…” she choked out has she cried and he comforted her.

He sighed “It won’t always hurt this much, what happened earlier was a great tragedy and the person who caused it was not brought to justice…” Diego paused with a very serious look on his face “…but it won’t always be that way…Even if I have to do it myself!”

Mia stopped crying for a moment and looked up at him, surely he wasn’t thinking of pursuing the case more? Had he not seen what had happened to everyone involved with Dahlia Hawthorne? “No, you can’t…we should let it go…move on.”

Diego raised one eyebrow “I’m sorry Kitten but I can’t see that happening. I know I said it won’t always hurt so much but pain like this…It doesn’t go away over night”.

She sniffed “I know that but…I don’t want…I don’t want…”

“Yes Kitten?” he asked quietly.

“Well…look at what’s happened…Valerie died, Mr. Fawles joined her. Everyone connected to that case…well they died and now today you and I were defending Mr. Falwes. If we get any more connected to this case; we might join them”.

Diego looked away a moment “Well…if you’re sure. Listen; we can always discuss this tomorrow, can’t we?”

“I…I guess so. Goodnight Mr. Armando...”

“After all this you’re still calling me Mr. Armando? Please, call me Diego…Goodnight Kitten” he said walking over to the half open door.

She waited till he had closed the door before doing as he wished “Goodnight…Diego” she whispered softly to the darkness.




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A little sadder than any of my other chapters. I wanted to capture how much this case hurt Mia, hopefully i didn't go over the top. It's also very short, hense why it took me so little time to post after the last one. Diego and Mia are still not an item, mainly because i wanted to steer away from the "Diego conforts Mia after Terry Fawles case and then they kiss". After all, they still barely know each other. He's staying her house because he feels bad for her after under going such trauma on her first case and doesn't think she should be left alone. Obviously the attraction is still there and Mia is starting to trust Diego and see past his smug exterior.
The next chapter shouldn't take too long as I'm writing it now. I probably would have ahd it on the end of this one making chapter six longer but i find it very difficult to find cut off points when it comes to chapters.

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No, you're not the only one :godot:
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See?! I'm not the only one who loves this story!


I think that a lot of people love this story, just not all of them say so :pearl:.
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Exactly. So, I guess I should say: "Not only am I not the only one who loves this story, but now I'm not the only one who says so." Is that better? :ema: Scientifically speaking?
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Exactly. So, I guess I should say: "Not only am I not the only one who loves this story, but now I'm not the only one who says so." Is that better? :ema: Scientifically speaking?


I guess, but I like it too........................... :larry:
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That's why I said I'm not the only one who says I like it. See?
*crickets chirp*
Never mind.

Anyway, I love this story! And so does GDM. And so do a lot of people (probably) who haven't posted.

I want to hug GDM for some reason...
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That's why I said I'm not the only one who says I like it. See?
*crickets chirp*
Never mind.

Anyway, I love this story! And so does GDM. And so do a lot of people (probably) who haven't posted.

I want to hug GDM for some reason...


Speaking of the story...................


WE NEED THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!! :wall-bang:
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Johnny Rotan; Lida_Rose; GDM; Thank you so much for your replies! You've no idea how much it means to me when people reply saying they like my story! It really encourages me to write more.

I've writen some of the next chapter and as soon as i get a chance to go onto the computor properly i'll finish it. Shouldn't be too long. Thanks again! :maya:

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As said by Donna Summers, "I will survive"

At least I think I will..............Err, wait.........

I probably shouldn't be saying things unless I am sure of them....... :yuusaku:
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I love the story too

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Chapter seven

Mia groaned as she awoke and attempted to sit up. Brushing her messy, uncombed hair out of her eyes as she put one foot out of the bed, gave up and collapsed back down.

“Mia? Are you awake?”

She yawned loudly, as and indication that she was awake.

Diego pushed open the door to reveal he was carrying a tray stacked full of bowls, plates and glasses, full of food. “I made you breakfast, how are you feeling?”

“Uh…thank you but…I’m really not hungry.” she replied.
He nodded and continued to look at her.

“You never answered my other question; How are you feeling?” he said after Mia had said nothing and continued to stare ahead blankly.

“I’m…fine…” she whispered.

Mia could see out of the corner of her eye Diego was going to drop the subject as he began to arrange the plates and bowls out. Clearly it was breakfast for two.

“E-Excuse me, I need to go to the toilet.” She said slinging her foot out of the side of the bed where Diego was not perched. She blushed as she saw that she had been sleeping in her flannel, teddy themed, pajamas, which weren’t an item of clothing she was desperate for anyone she worked with, to see her in.

As soon as she reached the bathroom she shut the door behind her and locked it. She leaned over the sink and looked into the mirror. Urgh, I look a sight… she thought as she looked at her smudged mascara underneath her eyes. She took a makeup remover pad and began to wipe away the back smudges, wishing that she could wipe away the entire incident, wipe away everything inside, all the pain from what had happened. She suddenly found a fresh wave of tears in her eyes as she fell to the floor cradling her head in her arms crying below her sink, desperately hoping that Diego wouldn’t hear. She felt as though she really needed some time alone to come to terms with everything that had happened in the last few days which was something she wasn’t all that sure would be easy with Diego fussing over her.

There was a knock on the bathroom door after a moment.

“Kitten, are you ok in there?” she could hear Diego call through.

Mia breathed out deeply. Some how, the sudden outburst of crying had helped. Not completely, but it had felt good to let out her emotions like that and not bottle them up inside the way she would sometimes do when something was bothering her.

“Yeah, I’m ok.” she called back, not entirely truthfully. After quickly finishing off her makeup removing job; she stepped outside of the bathroom to prove she was ok.

“Are you...sure?” he said putting his hands on her shoulders and peering down into her face skeptically.

“No but I don’t feel as bad as I did before.” she answered honestly but still avoiding his gaze and noticing how he still had his hands on her shoulders. Thinking about this made her remember how he’d been through everything that she had recently. While it was true it hadn’t been his first case it was still a pretty traumatizing thing to happen. “What about you though?”

“What about me?” he asked looking genuinely puzzled by the question.

“What I mean is, well…Are you ok? The last few days can’t have been easy for you either”

Diego took his hands of her shoulders but continued to stare right into her eyes as he said “Yeah, don’t worry about me Kitten. I’m completely fine; It’s you I’m worried about.”

“Well…don’t be I’m fine. Yes I’m sad…but I’ll get over it…right?” She said, clearly not just asking Diego this.

Diego paused and surveyed her for a moment before saying “I’m sorry but it’s not up to me how much this affects you…If it was I’d have you not care at all.”

Mia felt her eyes well up “How could I not care? He died and it’s my entire fault! If I’d known being a lawyer would be like this I’d never of become one!” she turned away from him and hurried off to her room shutting the door behind her.

She heard him follow her and stand outside as he began to tap on the closed door quietly “Mia…Mia.” she could hear him repeat softly “It wasn’t your fault.” After getting no answer he continued “You pressed him for answers because that’s your job. I would bet my life that if you’d known what he’d do you’d not have done that…You’re a good lawyer Mia. I saw that yesterday; you’re no ordinary rookie.” Mia heard Diego sigh “I understand if you need some time alone but don’t do anything rash ok? The world needs more morally correct lawyers like you in it. The kind of Lawyers who defend someone because they’re innocent…not for money…And they don’t turn requests down because they’re too difficult and they’re scared of losing…Because...” Diego was silent only for a moment before he finally said “Well…I’m sorry, I should have taken the Terry Fawles case…” Mia winced at his name “…And I shouldn’t have been so scared of losing my win record and then acted smug when you took the case…What I’m trying to say is…well I’m sorry because you wouldn’t be here like this today if you hadn’t taken it on. It’s my fault…and I’m so sorry…” He finally stopped talking; after all he’d said all the guilty things he’d been thinking last night while poor Mia had been upstairs crying. The feeling of If only he’d taken it instead…Why hadn’t he taken it? Because the new rookie at the office that he’d caught listening in on conversations had been so interested in it and he’d wanted to seem tough and experienced in front of her?

And why had he wanted her to think that anyway?



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Well there we go...almost a week late, sorry but I've had very little access to the computor lately. I also had a little writers block. Anyway I was thinking a little re-naming of the story was in order (I still don't like "Mia Fey- The story"). Well anyway I'm working on that and the next chapter. Thanks for reading. Please review!

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WOOO-HOOO! New chapter! *reads it*
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Again, another fantastic chapter!

Please continue to write, you are amazing!!!
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Well, I just read through what's there so far, and I have to say your characterization is wonderful. Everything sounds just like the character who says it. Diego sounds perfectly smug in the beginning, and I like that the incident does soften him up. Your structure is great. It's never really explained why Mia would take such a difficult case as her first (aside from "But he's innocent!"), so you showed that in a way that makes sense, with her partly taking it to spite Diego.
Speaking of, the way you have them interact is very in-character. I can follow when Mia gets irritated at his attitude (and get a bit annoyed myself-- Diego really can be a jerk), and her thought process flows well. It's easy to see what she's saying.

Basically, it all makes sense, which is something I myself have trouble with in my writing, so I can appreciate that. I'm impressed that you're taking on such an ambitious project--this looks like it's gonna be looooong--and I can't wait to read more! Great job!
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This story is absolutely fantastic!
I personally like Mia Fey, she is one of my favorite characters (along with Pearl :pearl: and Trucy :minuki: )
I've studied the timeline and characters of the games for my own stories a lot, and this story embodies it all perfectly.
When I write my own stories, I often have a problem with projecting my own personality onto that of the characters (which is fine for the slightly goofy characters like Maya and Gumshoe, but bad for the super-serious ones like Edgeworth and Diego.)
In this story, however, I can't see any problems like that. Mia comes off as very compassionate, and Diego comes off as smug at first, but is shown to have a sensitive side later.
As much as I'd love to only give praise, I noticed a few potential issues. These will probably be addressed later, but I want to make sure that you know about them, in case they weren't intentional.
First, the nickname "kitten" kinda popped up out of nowhere.
Of course, there isn't really anything you can do about that anyway, as it actually seems to be thought up on the spot in the actual game, so unless you wanted to change that, it would have to stay the way it is now. (although, Miles Edgeworth is actually mentioned there, too.)
The second is actually a few problems with Marvin Grossberg. Nobody really cares about him, but it's something I noticed nevertheless.
First, he doesn't really have a large presence (not really surprising, actually).
But the major issue here is with Redd White. In case 1-2 (or 1-4, I forget which) Mia mentions that after her mother's public disgrace, she "held an audience" with the dead, and came up with 2 names.
First, Redd White, who gave information about the channeling to the press.
And second, Marvin Grossberg, who gave the name of the medium to Redd White in return for a promise of riches.
I've always figured that Mia left Kurain to find these people.
When she found Grossberg law offices, she probably met with Grossberg, and eventually determined that he was tricked. Something that happened there might have convinced her to become a lawyer (perhaps a realization that it was the only way to catch Redd White).
But then there's the issue about Redd White himself. Mia followed him for years, a fact that Grossberg is aware of, as he mentions it in case 1-2. But the question is when she started following him. You're starting to get to the part of Mia Fey's life that we know nothing about (the 6 months in between the Fawles case and Diego's poisoning, the 6 months in between that and the Wright case, and then the years in between that and Phoenix's first case). There is potential for timeline issues, and I just wanted to make sure you knew about that.
Personally, I don't think that there will be problems, and I can't wait for the next chapter. Nice work! :edgy:
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Firstly; Wow, thank you so so much for the praise everyone. It means so much to me that you all took the time to read my work!

GDM: Thank you! Complinents of the story mean a great deal to me and i hope you continue to enjoy the story as i go on. :maya:

Lida_ Rose: You've been reviewing right from the start; thank you so much. If I'd had no reviews I might not have bothered to continue. Thank you! :minuki:

Zilvyc: Well firstly I'd like to thank you for such a long review and such a complimentary one too. I've always found it slightly difficult to keep Diego in charecter because I don't want to -
a) Make him seem too soft
b) Bring in the Mia/Diego thing too soon.
Mia seems so innocent at the begining of the case and it's clear straight away she didn't have very much time to prepare and there's also that the only reason she seems to have to deffend Terry Fawles is that she knows he's innocent (I'm guessing due to her Magatama). Diego is smug; she says that herself on his profile so i tried very hard to portray that. However, no one woud be mean enough to taunt someone after they went through what Mia did right? And that's why I softened up his charecter so much afterwards. Thanks again, hope you continue to enjoy the story (though as you said it will be a long one!). :phoenix:

Thibaroo Flufflefox: Wow; you're review was even longer and also very helpful. Some of the things from Ace attorney seriously confuse me such as the timeline. I looked at the one on this site which has helped a bit but i find the whole "Misty channeled spirits from from Dl-6 incident" really confusing. I wasn't sure what to include about Mia's mother and how much Mia knows about what's happened or about Marvin Grossberg. So Mia goes to the Marvin Grossberg offices with the two names Redd White and Grossberg knowing that they had a conection with the DL-6 incident where her mother dissapeared? Redd White was blackmailing Grossberg for all those years because he'd testified about Misty's powers? It would be reeeeaaaaally useful if you could explain this in points if you have time as I've hit wrtiers block because of all of this. Only if you don't mind though. Don't feel obliged.
(By the way; You're name is one of the cutest things I've ever heard! :pearl: Thank you so much for taking the time to review and read my story!)

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Aw, shucks. *blush*
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All the praise you are receiving is well deserved, you are a brilliant writer!
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ACK! Why haven't I read this yet!?!?!
Iamsosorryiamsosorryiamsosorry!!!

Anyway, I have to admit that this is one of your more deeper works yet, and I can't wait to see how it pans out. The main thing I want to applaud you on is the characterization of Mia and Diego's relationship; it isn't really quickly, but it isn't out of character. I can't wait to see more, but I'm also going to be sad when Mia dies. :sadshoe:
On a side note, you title could relate to the quote "A lawyer can't cry until it's all over". I don't know how you'd condense that into a title, but that could work.

Also, be careful of your 'an' because they tend to become 'and' if that makes any sense. :meekins:
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Caelestis: Thank you so much for reviewing! Yes thi si one of my deeper work and it'll get a hell of alot deeper once Diego gets poisened. After all, the story of Mia and Diego is a very sad one. I'm hoping I'll capture that in this fic (which will go on for a while).

Anyway; on with the next chapter!

Chapter eight

Mia sat awkwardly against the bottom her head in her hands listening to Diego through the door; wishing that he’d go away. At the back of her mind this feeling mingled with guilt, after all Diego was the one who’d been there for her after what had happened; the one who’s taken her home; helped her to bed; made her breakfast and been nice to her. He seemed to understand; why couldn’t he understand she needed time alone right now?

Eventually his voice disappeared; Mia assumed he’d given up and she heard his footsteps trail off down the hallway. Why do I feel so bad? It’s totally understandable to want to be alone isn’t it…Which would be ok…but why am I angry? Diego actually admitted he was wrong not to take the case for the reason he said. Masses of questions stormed through Mia’s mind as she sat slumped there before she finally feel into a deep sleep. She was stood by Maya in a field full of large reindeer that she could see were steadily trotting towards them. Mia had always been frightened of reindeer and so began to creep quickly towards a forest on the other side of the field. She recognized it from long ago as a forest Maya had not wanted to go into when she had been younger. When they reached the green leafy forest they were met by Diego Armando who was wearing his usual clothes only green and cream instead.

“Mia, Mia’s sister, if I were you I wouldn’t go in there. It could be dangerous and I don’t want to lose my win record”. He said smugly with his arms folded.

“That makes no sense and I’m going in there anyway.” Mia replied taking a stepping into the lush greenery. Maya followed her closely as the forest grew darker and darker as they went further in. Before long Mia felt unsure of where she was as she looked around desperately trying to find and opening in the dense leaves and trees.

“Mia, where are we? I’m scared!” Maya said despairingly.

“I-I don’t know…” she said slowly wondering if they’d be able to re-trace their steps.
Maya began to cry as she asked “Why didn’t you listen to that nice man and not come here; why did you take the case? It’s dangerous here! You’re supposed to protect me but you only ever think of yourself! You’re selfish Mia Fey and stubborn!”

Suddenly huge reindeer began to close in around the creeping from behind trees with legs as long as Mia was tall; she could hear Maya screaming as she yelled “No, go away! You’re too big, I’m not a good enough lawyer!” Just as the largest reindeer began to nudge her face aggressively she awoke suddenly. She ran her hand across her face groggily and sat up realizing she was still slumped at the end of her bed. She shakily got up and sat down on the duvet smoothing it out with her hand distractedly. What the hell was that dream about? It made no sense at all; huge reindeers and creepy forests with Diego Armando standing at the head of them. What inspired me to dream something like that? She yawned and got up and walked out of the room to go and freshen herself up.

Though still a little tired Mia brushed her clean hair (for the first time in days) from her face and walked down the stairs slightly dragging her feet on her clean, cream carpet. The stairs were only about 3 all the way up as her room and the bathroom was only slightly elevated above the rest of the small bungalow. She had been surprised she’s even been able to afford the small one bed roomed bungalow and yet her Aunt Morgan had happily agreed to pay for it. She walked over to the coffee table where she had spied a small note.

“Dear Kitten, Gone back to work. PLEASE call me if you need ANYTHING at all.”

She smiled to herself. She really had got the wrong side of him when she’d first met him but now he was showing himself to be a true friend who seemed to genuinely care about her. She put on her coat because it was raining (again) and left the house; getting a taxi to the Grossberg Criminal law and defense firm.

As she stepped inside it was strange to think she’d only been working there for two days. Two days and I’m traumatized…possibly for the rest of my life? It was such bad luck seeing that case and becoming so obsessed with taking it. If I hadn’t seen in I wouldn’t feel like this or be such a mess…

She saw there was no one at reception and so proceeded to her room to drop off her bag to go and see Diego to apologize for shouting at him. And why did I shout anyway? Just because he said he wished she didn’t care at all about this which was because he doesn’t want me to be sad. After all to some lawyers learn to completely separate their social life from work. Is it possible that the prodigy Miles Edgeworth is completely un-affected but the whole incident yesterday? She thought all this as she walked up the stairs and into Diego’s office. There would be times in the future where Mia would wish that she had knocked or remembered she forgotten to turn her thermostat down and ran home not disturbing Diego Armando for perhaps another twenty minutes when she had returned. This was because of the image that met her eyes as she casually entered; Diego and Penny the sectary in a full passionate embrace in the corner of his room.




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Ok, there must be TONS of mistakes here. Perhaps not for much longer thanks to me new proofreader (Heads up to Thibaroo Flufflefox [Thank you!] :pearl: ).
I'm posting this chapter while i should really be upstairs running my bath so it's really rushed so I'll look over it another time.
The strange dream Mia has is actually a mix around of a dream i had the other day and it has stuff about "Lawyers" and "cases" because in my opinion dreams are a mish-mash of things that you're thinking about/worrying about in your real life. They often make no sense like mia's (and mine!) Oh and those reindeer in my dream were MASSIVE, no joke...
You're probably thinking "What the hell is Diego doing making out (because that's all i mean by full on "passionate embrace") with Penny in the corner of his office? Well all will become clear later on it the story (If you haven't already guessed?)

Thanks to to everyone, sorry this is so rushed!

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