DNR's first sprite comic

Thu Dec 20, 2007 10:10 pm

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It's probably not that good but..........here it is.

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Re: DNR's first sprite comic

Fri Dec 21, 2007 12:36 pm

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Well, I found it amusing.

Re: DNR's first sprite comic

Sat Dec 22, 2007 12:22 am

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Why, thank you.

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Re: DNR's first sprite comic

Mon Dec 31, 2007 8:48 pm

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The Quality of the Comic Mechanics is very Poor, there is no Speech Balloons or Anything similar, Making it Quite hard to read the text, And the Joke seems to be more of a "What can I do with these Sprites" as opposed to a "What can I do with these Characters"

It seems like you just wanted to make a joke about Pearl channeling Mia, And made Useless Filler to get to it.

I would recommend trying to Either Use the Text Boxes from the games, or At Some form of Speech Bubble, This would make it look Nicer and Easier to read.

For Writing, I would recommend trying some more original, don't just find a Funny Sprite you like and try to use it, Think of Good Script that leads into a Funny Joke, Ignoring the fact that thats that Sprite and such, make it more about the game then One small detail.

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Re: DNR's first sprite comic

Tue Jan 01, 2008 4:24 am

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Thank you for the suggestions. I'll improve in the future.

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Re: DNR's first sprite comic

Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:14 pm

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Awsome and very saucy :hotti:

You could improve the format(like try to use the Phoenix Wright text box.

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