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You may want to change it to "Milise" so Laurice upholds his end of the "bargain".
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You may want to change it to "Milise" so Laurice upholds his end of the "bargain".

Hmm. Remind me again what this bargain was? I've completely forgotten. :payne:

"Milise" just sounds bad though.
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Ew, Milisie sounds terrible. Larry always called him Edgeworth anyway.

Your art is great, by the way, Gwif. Much better than what I could do with pencils. D:

We should have a poll, wheter people would prefer it to be sprited or drawn. I don't think I'd mind spriting all the characters, as long as I could reuse some stuff. And someone else would have to make the backgrounds. -is lazy-
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I'd buy it in a heartbeat! Imagine if it was a pop-up book! :ka-whip:
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I'd buy it in a heartbeat! Imagine if it was a pop-up book! :ka-whip:


...

BEST IDEA EVER
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Franzy's whip would pop-up on nearly every page! Although it makes me pity the scruffy dog :eh?:
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The question isn't would you buy this book, it's who wouldn't? Seriously, that is just awesome. I love that illustration for the first page. The "LD" was a nice touch. Wonder if this could get published? :godot:
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So I don't have time to make the whole cover tonight. So I just made Franzy's art.

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Made entirely in crayon, inspired by the above post, made to look amateurish O_O
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Sweet. I tried doing my sample page in crayon, but it's too hard to work with (I know, I know... it's crayon!) and I didn't have enough colors.
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Sweet. I tried doing my sample page in crayon, but it's too hard to work with (I know, I know... it's crayon!) and I didn't have enough colors.

s'not like I did a thorough job with it though
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Bored so I did another page (out of order, yes). It's also in lazy Larry style.

Spoiler: Page 10
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Porcunix! This one needs some major reworking as I didn't even realize her body faces the wrong way until too late.

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Gwiffen wrote:
Bored so I did another page (out of order, yes). It's also in lazy Larry style.

Spoiler: Page 10
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Porcunix! This one needs some major reworking as I didn't even realize her body faces the wrong way until too late.

Ha, is this following any story at all? I like it though.

I still wanna try my hand at actually drawing something up, rather than putting together a random crayon sketch (it took me about five minutes)

but yes, I would definitely buy this book.
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It's following this story I posted on page one:
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Spoiler: JFA
Franzy's Whippety Whip Trip
By Laurice Deauxnim


Franziska von Karma was a prosecutor who always carried her trusty whip with her.

Franzy lived happily in Germany, but she was always thinking about her brother Miles catching evil people in America.
Nobody had ever defeated Miles before! Franzy always looked up to her brother.

One day, Franzy received a letter from her brother Miles.
Her brother Miles wrote:
Dear Franziska,

I am sorry, but I have finally been beaten. My perfect win record has been broken. I am leaving for a long time, so please do not try to find me.

Your brother,
Miles


"Miles, I have always been behind you," said Franzy, "but if I can defeat whoever beat you, brother, then I can finally surpass you!"

So, Franzy went to America to find her brother and whoever beat him.
At the airport in America, she saw a scruffy whippet dog. The dog was very hungry and looked like he would gobble everything up!

Not scared at all, Franzy took out her whip and taught the dog a lesson.

"Where is the one who beat my brother?" Franzy asked the dog.
"Please don't hurt me anymore." said the dog, "The one who beat him was the porcupine."

So, Franzy visited the porcupine's house. It was a mess.

"I am here to defeat you." Franzy said to the porcupine.
Determined, Franzy took out her whip again and tried to teach the porcupine a lesson.

The porcupine, however, curled up into a ball and had such a strong defense that she could not touch him.

Defeated, Franzy threw down her whip in anger and stormed away.
"I can not believe I lost to that porcupine! I am going home!" she said.

At the airport, she was about to leave, but then she heard a strange beeping sound. She turned around.
It was her brother Miles!

"How did you find me?" Franzy asked Miles. "I was looking everywhere for you!"
"The little whippet dog helped me." said Miles.

To Franzy's surprise, Miles took something out of his bag. "My whip!" Franzy said.
"The little porcupine gave this to me. I want you to have it back." said Miles.

"Are you not ashamed of me?" asked Franziska to her brother. "I too lost to the porcupine."
Miles, however, just smiled and said, "Perfection is meaningless. I lost sight of what was good. I am just glad that I could see you again."

Overwhelmed by everything, Franzy cried tears of happiness.
"I have always been behind you, brother, but I don't care anymore." said Franzy, "All that matters is that we are together again."

THE END

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Gwiffen wrote:
It's following this story I posted on page one:
Gwiffen wrote:
Spoiler: JFA
Franzy's Whippety Whip Trip
By Laurice Deauxnim


Franziska von Karma was a prosecutor who always carried her trusty whip with her.

Franzy lived happily in Germany, but she was always thinking about her brother Miles catching evil people in America.
Nobody had ever defeated Miles before! Franzy always looked up to her brother.

One day, Franzy received a letter from her brother Miles.
Her brother Miles wrote:
Dear Franziska,

I am sorry, but I have finally been beaten. My perfect win record has been broken. I am leaving for a long time, so please do not try to find me.

Your brother,
Miles


"Miles, I have always been behind you," said Franzy, "but if I can defeat whoever beat you, brother, then I can finally surpass you!"

So, Franzy went to America to find her brother and whoever beat him.
At the airport in America, she saw a scruffy whippet dog. The dog was very hungry and looked like he would gobble everything up!

Not scared at all, Franzy took out her whip and taught the dog a lesson.

"Where is the one who beat my brother?" Franzy asked the dog.
"Please don't hurt me anymore." said the dog, "The one who beat him was the porcupine."

So, Franzy visited the porcupine's house. It was a mess.

"I am here to defeat you." Franzy said to the porcupine.
Determined, Franzy took out her whip again and tried to teach the porcupine a lesson.

The porcupine, however, curled up into a ball and had such a strong defense that she could not touch him.

Defeated, Franzy threw down her whip in anger and stormed away.
"I can not believe I lost to that porcupine! I am going home!" she said.

At the airport, she was about to leave, but then she heard a strange beeping sound. She turned around.
It was her brother Miles!

"How did you find me?" Franzy asked Miles. "I was looking everywhere for you!"
"The little whippet dog helped me." said Miles.

To Franzy's surprise, Miles took something out of his bag. "My whip!" Franzy said.
"The little porcupine gave this to me. I want you to have it back." said Miles.

"Are you not ashamed of me?" asked Franziska to her brother. "I too lost to the porcupine."
Miles, however, just smiled and said, "Perfection is meaningless. I lost sight of what was good. I am just glad that I could see you again."

Overwhelmed by everything, Franzy cried tears of happiness.
"I have always been behind you, brother, but I don't care anymore." said Franzy, "All that matters is that we are together again."

THE END

Ah, I must've missed it. *reads*
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Steelfang wrote:
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So I don't have time to make the whole cover tonight. So I just made Franzy's art.

[url=http://forums.court-records.net/viewtopic.php?f=12&t=5154]-picture-

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Made entirely in crayon, inspired by the above post, made to look amateurish O_O


Aw, I'm flattered! <3

And I just thought of something: what if we made it rhyme? Kid's books are always awesome with rhymes, and we could make the story more inane and humourous than it is right now. Like...

Whippity trip! went Franzy's whip.
"Hey, that's not very nice!" said Nick.
"Whips aren't fun, that really hurts!"
"So put it away!" he said with his fingertip!

And then we could have a picture of little Porcuphoenix pointing at Franzy!
...kind of a stretch, but it took me about three seconds to come up with. >_>
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Looks like I'm not the only one who simply had to draw a picture of this epic book. In any case, behold my poor drawing skills.
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oops, I forgot the title...just imagine its there.
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These are all made of complete WIN.
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Seraphie wrote:
Steelfang wrote:
Seraphie wrote:
So I don't have time to make the whole cover tonight. So I just made Franzy's art.

[url=http://forums.court-records.net/viewtopic.php?f=12&t=5154]-picture-

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http://img261.imageshack.us/img261/7721 ... 001jk5.png
Made entirely in crayon, inspired by the above post, made to look amateurish O_O


Aw, I'm flattered! <3

And I just thought of something: what if we made it rhyme? Kid's books are always awesome with rhymes, and we could make the story more inane and humourous than it is right now. Like...

Whippity trip! went Franzy's whip.
"Hey, that's not very nice!" said Nick.
"Whips aren't fun, that really hurts!"
"So put it away!" he said with his fingertip!

And then we could have a picture of little Porcuphoenix pointing at Franzy!
...kind of a stretch, but it took me about three seconds to come up with. >_>

You should be. Inspiration strikes me at the strangest times though...
And most of the time I can't draw unless I have something to look at, but if I have that much, I think I could do really well. :godot:

And yes, rhyme time wins.
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Sorry, but I've always hated rhyming children's stories. They always sound more unnatural than usual (and that's saying a lot given the genre). I do like the added WHIPPITY TRIP sound effects though! I'll add that in to the original post.

If you can find a way to make it all rhyme and not sound bad, by all means.
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I'm still trying to think of things that actually rhyme with whip XD
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Maybe some rhymes here and there, a compromise of sorts. Remember, "Win Through Compromise"
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Ta da. Page number 1.

Spoiler: Page 1
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OMG, it's Wonder Woman and her glowing whip!


Since I'm this bored, I suppose I can do the entire book (so it'll be consistent). A guest cover would be awesome though!
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...I. Love this. XD.
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Ta da. Page number 1.

Spoiler: Page 1
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OMG, it's Wonder Woman and her glowing whip!


Since I'm this bored, I suppose I can do the entire book (so it'll be consistent). A guest cover would be awesome though!


lol That's so awesome. :-P
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Okay, I did a bunch of tweaking on the three pages I've already done (e.g. fixing earrings, embroidery, etc.). I'm thinking I should probably make my own thread for this as well, but I can't decide which forum to put it under. Testimony or Fanart? Or maybe just generic "Present Evidence."
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Since you're doing drawings, shouldn't they go under fanart?
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Right then. I'll have the thread up when I do the next page.

How's the cover coming though? I totally want to see it in chibi-sprites!
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Sorry, I'm grounded right now, with very limited time online during the weekday. ):

However, during the weekends I do have free time and can get the cover done! :D
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I could do... something! Or, I'd like to do something to contribute. I love projects like these, and I could use something to do.
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Hm, more covers would totally be cool (could call it... "sleeve art"). You could even try some of the pages yourself if you felt like it. Goodness knows you can probably do much better than my lazy Larry style doodles. :larry2:


EDIT: Okay, created a new central thread. If I may, I'd like to go ahead and ask for permission to post those covers you have made/are making. Specifically Brandon Strong's already made one and Seraphie's coming soon one. I'd give credit of course!

Oh, page three added as well.
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S'fine with me. Page 1 is awesome, btw. Radioactive whip ftw.
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