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Misfortune's of GodotTopic%20Title

A spirit possessor of a thousand souls

Gender: None specified

Location: It'd appear I'd be under your bed.

Rank: Suspect

Joined: Sun Nov 22, 2009 1:44 am

Posts: 19

This is my first attempt for a fan-fic here in this forum, so you might expect some mistakes. Godot's days can't get any worser. Yet what's happening to him that's so bad? There's one answer, and that'll be in these up-coming chapters!

Spoiler: Chapter 1: Bad Morning
Godot yawned and got out of bed, yawning. "Hm. I wonder if there's any case today." he yawns, as he gets his clothes on and his mask. He walked down, to cook some ramen. But what happens to the stove he has, has a effect he does NOT like; Blowing up. As he oven blew up, part of Godot's mask blew off two. In anger, Godot shouted angrily "SHOOT! What caused THIS to spontaniously combust? I have the microwave at least...".
He got out two packs of ramen noodles from the pantry, and starts getting them open with a knife. He got a bowl he uses alot for his ramen, he put the dry ramen in there, and opened the chicken stock. The chicken stock poured in the bowl as he gets the chicken stock all out. He walked to the sink and started using the sink, turning on the water, whistling and waiting for the water to get full enough to microwave it. "Perfect." he whispered. He carried the ramen to the microwave, and pressed 2, 0, 0 and started the microwave.
He walked to the office and rolled the chair to the computer. He sat down on the computer, and started typing. "No big deal." he though. He checked his E-Mail and saw a weird e-mail. "Hm. What's this?" he wondered. He clicked it, and... He gets to Microsoft Bluescreen. "DANG IT! What the heck is with the viruses?" he yells in frustration. He got out of his seat and fell out of his chair, hitting his head on the hard floor. Flustered, he yelled and screams. "I need a break..." he sighs.


Spoiler: Chapter 2: Godot be takin' Damage this morning
Godot got up. "I need a vacation really.... I mean, this is unacceptable." he hisses. In frustration he went to the kitchen to get his ramen. He opened the microwave, only to see blank white walls of the microwave. "Oh god...." Godot looked around, frustrated. "I want my ramen!" he yells.
He eventually finds Phoenix Wright on a chair, eating the ramen. "What? I don't have enough money. So I ate your ramen" he muffled. "THAT'S NOT GOOD ENOUGH!" Godot screams, slamming his coffee on the table. "Oh, what does it matter? Eat it.... I don't care much more..." he sighed. He walked ot the house, and wandered the village. Constantly. He bumped into Pearl, whom seemed to be waiting for required assistance. "Pearl, what are you doing here?" he asked Pearl. Pearl replied with a sweet voice "I'm waiting for Mystic Maya to come." as she looked at Godot. "Why's part of your face not there?" she curiously asked Godot.
"My stove blew up...." he answered, in a mumbling voice. "Well, Godot, that's terrible.... Did you have any breakfast though?" she questioned Godot. "OK, Pearl, not trying to be mean or anything, my name isn't pronounced Go-DOT, is Go-DOH, with a long O, and no, I didn't have breakfest." he replied. "Pearly!!" a girl in the distance yelled. "Coming, Mystic Maya!" she called back, and ran to Mystic Maya.
"Heh. Kids these days." Godot says to himself. He strolled through Kurain Village. When he stopped to take a sip of his coffee, a coconut hit his mug, and broke it. "MY COFFEE!" he yelled. "Serves you right, stupid prosecutor guy!" Cody laughs. "The name's Godot you idiot..." he angrily growls at Cody. "OK, but I'll getcha again, Godot. NERD!" he yelled at him and ran off, laughing. "I swear, if that kid does that again, I'm gonna kill him..." he growls. He continued strolling, wondering what would happen next. "I just need a simple day that I won't get hurt..." he sighs. He walked in the court, and sat down on the couch. He sighed and slumped. "I really, really, really need a vacation...." he sighed.


Last edited by Mr. Doom Bringer on Sun Nov 22, 2009 6:41 pm, edited 3 times in total.
Re: Misfortune's of GodotTopic%20Title
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A beautiful world indeed.

Gender: Male

Rank: Ace Attorney

Joined: Fri Aug 29, 2008 1:09 am

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Besides a few grammer errors and spelling errors (I didn't know Godot was a she), it wasn't the worst thing I've read. It's a tad on the short side, and I would like you to make it seperate paragraphs rather than one huge wall of text.
Re: Misfortune's of GodotTopic%20Title

A spirit possessor of a thousand souls

Gender: None specified

Location: It'd appear I'd be under your bed.

Rank: Suspect

Joined: Sun Nov 22, 2009 1:44 am

Posts: 19

I noticed right when I posted. Plus, I didn't notice those. I had some typo's really. Hey, not everyone's perfect anyways though.
Re: Misfortune's of GodotTopic%20Title
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A beautiful world indeed.

Gender: Male

Rank: Ace Attorney

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True, but you should check for things like that before you post a fanfic.

Also, don't take my comments as insults. It's constructive criticism, I mean for you to improve.
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A spirit possessor of a thousand souls

Gender: None specified

Location: It'd appear I'd be under your bed.

Rank: Suspect

Joined: Sun Nov 22, 2009 1:44 am

Posts: 19

I fixed the things that needed editing, and whatnot. So it shouldn't be a problem reading it. Hey, I made fanfics, but never Phoenix Wright ones, so it's a little hard for me.
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A spirit possessor of a thousand souls

Gender: None specified

Location: It'd appear I'd be under your bed.

Rank: Suspect

Joined: Sun Nov 22, 2009 1:44 am

Posts: 19

Chapter 2 has been made! I'd like to see what you people want in the next chapter, and what to correct in this corrent chapter.
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Audere est facere.

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Mostly spelling, grammar & whatnot. And I agree, I'd also prefer paragraphed text, because it's hard to read. But it's better than a few I've read.
I've been away for far too long.
So long, in fact, that all of my signatures now exist behind a paywall.
Bummer.
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The Magatama of Truth!

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I read it, it's pretty good. Keep up the good work!
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