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Btw, Further requests are temporarily turned OFF
I might offer to help with some small things, though
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I've already said everything on AAO, so I'll just say you have improved.
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i like the scarred twins(by the way i ignored all below that line XD)
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I'll look at that later... I'm making mockup screenies for my fangame at the moment...
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No DSis in the courtroom please.
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I like some of the extra things you did for Apollos front sprite.
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I like the last one best: I think it has the quirky, animated feel of apollo's court sprites, from the front
EDIT: How do you set up polls? I want to see what you think should be entered in the sprite cup
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I think only really high ranked members can do that =T
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Post which ones you think should be entered
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There's a problem in that logic!
If people here were entering the contest, I would think they would vote for the worst thing to guarantee a win, don't you..?
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thats strangr logic Drammy!
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It makes perfect sense, Mr. Liberty!
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Then you should enter what is below the line XD
No I kid.
Enter whichever you like best.
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With older Maya, pretty goo djust fix her hair to look a little more like Maya's because it looks more over like Ema cosplaying May9a. Tweak it some and it should be okay =3
I'd say
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You've improved greatly since seeing your previous edits, so I'm sure you'l improve even further in no time. XD
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What do you mean by "Wonky"
?Errm... He could just be standing at an angle... They look fine on the courtroom background as far as I can see...
I see what you mean... I'll change it a little.
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Kristoph: I agree with LadyK; he looks like he's an aide. It's because of the way his body is positioned; if you look at the attorney sprites, you'll see that their bodies aren't facing to the side like aide sprites are. (Basically, compare how Maya's sprite is positioned to how Phoenix's body is positioned and hopefully you'll see the difference... o 3o) Also, because we only really see the side of his head and his body almost never moves, you don't get the full impact of his mood.
Phoenix: Work on making your lines blend more. For example, his closed eyes in the first sprite. They look, to be blunt, amateur-ish because it's one color and it doesn't make a smooth transition into the skin color. You can borrow the "blending colors," as I put it, from his in-court sprites when he's blinking, or you can just mess around with the color in Paint/GIMP/whatever you use.
For the last two sprites, make sure the hairline is consistent...
By that I mean, you see where some of his skin color "bleeds" into his hair? Just fix that up with a few dabs of black and it should be fine.Apollo: In the second and third frames in all of the sprites, his chin becomes more "manly." It, instead of coming together in a nicer point, flattens out more dramatically. Do you get what I mean...? Yes...? No...? Anyways, besides that, it's rather nice. The apprentice!Polly
is nothing amazing, but not bad. The only flaw I can see is with his neck. Instead of going diagonally to where his shirt ends, it should be moar straight.
Prosecutor: Too much poses for me to comment on. The bit of advice I'll have for you is to watch where you place his head. To giver an example, his head in his out of court sprite was placed too high and so, his neck seems longer. You can tell because his hair in his in-court sprites almost touch his shoulders; in that sprite, it's pretty far away.
Witnesses: Nice. The scars are done pretty well and so are the faces. Just make the head bigger in each sprites that have their head turned away. In their last poses, their head stops at their ear; if they had hair, it would've fine, but since they're bald, it doesn't work. Also, try to keep the eyes consistent. When they're facing forward, their eyes are bigger and they don't have that line under their eyes like Edgey seems to have.
Maya: Nice body. (.. Man, that came out wrong. D; ) The body you sprited isn't perfect, but it's better than what I can draw amd pretty darn good.. I especially love the burger pose. I would say the last three poses are the worst: the third and second to the last because the anatomy is way off. Her head is too big for her body and her boobs are the size of Pearl's. (Regular Pearl, not Mia!Pearl. ;) ) And the last one because of her arm and body. The body shouldn't be facing forward like that; Objection!sprites are turned to the side slightly. Try looking at Young!Mia for references for that. That aside, I do like the idea for using Ema for Maya. It's a breath of fresh air when thinking of all of the Mia-Mayas. x 3x
By the way, this isn't an attack or anything of the sort. If you felt that I was being offensive, then trust me, it wasn't on purpose. I'm just a very negative person.
( ; 3; ) Also, if you don't really understand by what I mean in some of my points, feel free to press for more information and I'll try to explain what I mean better (and with moar pics).
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Anyhow, I fixed up the hair on Phoenix' second co-council pose and Apollo's chin:
Any better?
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Anyway...
On the Phoenix sheet, where he is co council, and his head is turning at an angle or whatnot; you should probably turn the hair at a slight angle, to go with the head.
Or else it just looks like his hair is stationary, and his head is moving.
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Oh, and I forgot to mention anything about him
He's a football coach who was on his way back from an after school practice, when he passed the allyway where the murder took place
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I'll have a look, though.
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Remind me never to do more than on request at once again
Anyhow, another ness pose.... Plus, I noticed that he's really small...
Lol, the midget football coach.
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